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  • I would like to illustrate the notion of progress by talking about the evolution of the technology, the science and social relationships.
  • Progress is made move forward, made go towards an upper degree or a regular evolution of the humanity, the civilization towards an ideal aim.What types of progress affect our life?
  • First, I will speak about the new technology, then secondly, I'll deal with the science progresses and to finish, I'll talk about the social relationships'evolution.
  • - New technologies are everywhere : multimedia, household electrical, phone, car, medical...
  • - many improvements : quality (image, sound, power...), esthetics, yield ... and incite people to consume more to indulge itself - ex : it's the case for apple technology (created by Steve Jobs the 1st April 1976) which seduces the population by his novelty and his quality.
  • All products (computeur : macintosh ; touchpad: Ipad ; phone: Iphone ; Mp4 : Ipod but also applications).
  • Text from an unofficial bigraphy of Steve Jobs - Allow better a one quality of life : food processor (to daily life as a vacuum cleaner for example), improvement of the equipments of medicine improved health, broadcasting of the information: invention of the radio, of tv so allow to know what surrounds us.
  • - Negative : social relationships weakened because people often speak through phone or computer so their life become virtual and then social contacts neglected (sites of meeting, sms, webcam...).
  • Now, let's focus on the science evolution which leads me to my second part of the idea of progress.
  • - Scientific discoveries: physics, in astrology, in medicine, in genetics...
  • - consequences : new medicine, vaccines (against gripp H1N1 recently), vast of knowledge on the celestial bodies which surrounds the Earth (The Moon : first step the 20 July 1969 ; Mars: sending of several robots at present Curiosity), research of new medical tehnics (against the ageing for example with a procesus of regeneration of the old organs – The Guardian ; or transplants posibility) and genetics (with the posibility transfers of genes to improve the cultures / cloning to maintain endangered species or be able to create model of study on particular diseases).
  • - Negatives : ethical problems (cloning because more individuality) + possible scientific error mortals or at least very grave (human stroke because of anti-ageing products but no the mouse guinea pig) Now, we are going to concentrate on the social relationships'evolution which leads me to my third part of the idea of progress.
  • - Racism : A lot formerly to the blacks (slaveries, persecution in certain countries) – Black like me by John Howard Griffin, and member of a religious order, ethnic groups but improvement with a good instruction, educations (less educational at the end of 19 ème century than today ).
  • Blacks in the power (Barack Obama), recognized as model of justice between the people (Nelson Mandela), world celebrities (Yannick Noah at Roland Garros, singer)...
  • - subservience of the women : The Taming of the Shrew by Shakerspeare : how must be a wife with hen husband.
  • Modern woman : different customs because men and women become equal (family) Cooking, household, works, children...
  • + laws for a bigger independence of the women (vote: France in 1942, abortion, work), suffragettes (created in 1903) in England, who fighting for their voting rights.
  • - today yet : inspite of laws + education, still of the racism in most of the countries (Toubirat, minister of justice and descendant of slave, offended by female monkey) / disparity salary man-woman (for the same work, the men gain 30 % more than the women) + more unemployment affects the women + often less prestigious jobs for women than for men.
  • To conclude, we can see that the progress affeting our life everyday in a lot of fields to allow us to live easily, learn or survive.
  • To my mind, it would be impossible for the civilized man to live without his new technologies because they are an integral part of his life.
  • However, it stays some more of progress to be made concerning social inequalities.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • I would like to illustrate the notion of progress by talking about the evolution of the technology, the science and social relationships.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 1PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 1
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    • Progress is made move forward, made go towards an upper degree or a regular evolution of the humanity, the civilization towards an ideal aim.What types of progress affect our life?
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 2PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 2
  • veta 3
    • First, I will speak about the new technology, then secondly, I'll deal with the science progresses and to finish, I'll talk about the social relationships'evolution.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 3PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 3
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    • - many improvements : quality (image, sound, power...), esthetics, yield ... and incite people to consume more to indulge itself - ex : it's the case for apple technology (created by Steve Jobs the 1st April 1976) which seduces the population by his novelty and his quality.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 5PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 5
  • veta 6
    • All products (computeur : macintosh ; touchpad: Ipad ; phone: Iphone ; Mp4 : Ipod but also applications).
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 6PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 6
  • veta 7
    • Text from an unofficial bigraphy of Steve Jobs - Allow better a one quality of life : food processor (to daily life as a vacuum cleaner for example), improvement of the equipments of medicine improved health, broadcasting of the information: invention of the radio, of tv so allow to know what surrounds us.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 7PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 7
  • veta 8
    • - Negative : social relationships weakened because people often speak through phone or computer so their life become virtual and then social contacts neglected (sites of meeting, sms, webcam...).
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 8PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 8
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  • veta 10
  • veta 11
    • - consequences : new medicine, vaccines (against gripp H1N1 recently), vast of knowledge on the celestial bodies which surrounds the Earth (The Moon : first step the 20 July 1969 ; Mars: sending of several robots at present Curiosity), research of new medical tehnics (against the ageing for example with a procesus of regeneration of the old organs – The Guardian ; or transplants posibility) and genetics (with the posibility transfers of genes to improve the cultures / cloning to maintain endangered species or be able to create model of study on particular diseases).
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 11PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 11
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    • - Negatives : ethical problems (cloning because more individuality) + possible scientific error mortals or at least very grave (human stroke because of anti-ageing products but no the mouse guinea pig) Now, we are going to concentrate on the social relationships'evolution which leads me to my third part of the idea of progress.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 12PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 12
  • veta 13
    • - Racism : A lot formerly to the blacks (slaveries, persecution in certain countries) – Black like me by John Howard Griffin, and member of a religious order, ethnic groups but improvement with a good instruction, educations (less educational at the end of 19 ème century than today ).
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 13PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 13
  • veta 14
    • Blacks in the power (Barack Obama), recognized as model of justice between the people (Nelson Mandela), world celebrities (Yannick Noah at Roland Garros, singer)...
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 14PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 14
  • veta 15
  • veta 16
    • Modern woman : different customs because men and women become equal (family) Cooking, household, works, children...
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 16PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 16
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    • + laws for a bigger independence of the women (vote: France in 1942, abortion, work), suffragettes (created in 1903) in England, who fighting for their voting rights.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 17PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 17
  • veta 18
    • - today yet : inspite of laws + education, still of the racism in most of the countries (Toubirat, minister of justice and descendant of slave, offended by female monkey) / disparity salary man-woman (for the same work, the men gain 30 % more than the women) + more unemployment affects the women + often less prestigious jobs for women than for men.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 18PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 18
  • veta 19
    • To conclude, we can see that the progress affeting our life everyday in a lot of fields to allow us to live easily, learn or survive.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 19PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 19
  • veta 20
    • To my mind, it would be impossible for the civilized man to live without his new technologies because they are an integral part of his life.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 20PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 20
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