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  • Dear Ms. MAWSON, I am contacting you because I am deeply interested in the Brand Controller position that is published on your website.
  • I originally obtained a degree in Business Studies, and I’ve currently been working in Paris as a Commercial Controller for one year and a half for the biggest French car maker.
  • Now I would like to have a challenging work experience in the UK.
  • I chose to apply for a job in your company because Entrepreneurship is one of the values that you defend and that I need to be independent in my work.
  • I am a result oriented person, always committed to enhance working processes.
  • For example, I have been in charge of the P&L leasing retreatment for all the G7 European subsidiaries.
  • I had to reduce variances between Estimate and Actual by 20% year to date vs. the same period in 2012.
  • To do so, I have implemented controls on the figures that we obtained from different IT sources, written user guides to help CFO calculate the estimate, and developed key indicators to follow up the action results.
  • At the end of June, we have cut the variances by 27% vs. 2012.
  • Furthermore, I have worked during 3 years in a support department for the SAP applications Business Object Finance and BW which has provided me a good command of financial ERP.
  • I would like the opportunity to be interviewed in person for this position in order to discuss my qualifications further at your time and convenience.
  • Also, I would be glad to provide you with any additional information needed.
  • Thank you for your consideration. Sincerely,

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    • Dear Ms. MAWSON, I am contacting you because I am deeply interested in the Brand Controller position that is published on your website.
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    • I originally obtained a degree in Business Studies, and I’ve currently been working in Paris as a Commercial Controller for one year and a half for the biggest French car maker.
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    • I chose to apply for a job in your company because Entrepreneurship is one of the values that you defend and that I need to be independent in my work.
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    • To do so, I have implemented controls on the figures that we obtained from different IT sources, written user guides to help CFO calculate the estimate, and developed key indicators to follow up the action results.
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    • Furthermore, I have worked during 3 years in a support department for the SAP applications Business Object Finance and BW which has provided me a good command of financial ERP.
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    • I would like the opportunity to be interviewed in person for this position in order to discuss my qualifications further at your time and convenience.
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