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  • It is sometime thought that advanced technology contributed more in the past than it does nowadays on people’s life.
  • In my opinion, the effect of recent technologies is prominent, but the benefits gained from early technological should not be ignored.
  • The previous technologies harnessed the power of electricity provide masses with great convenience.
  • For instance, families can finish their household chores efficiently with the help of a variety of appliances, such as vacuums, rice cookers and washing machines.
  • What’s more, because the extensive use of lights, citizens were likely to have nighttime activities.
  • These changes make it possible for people lead a better life.
  • Many means of transportation have been invented in the past decades and they play important roles in enhancing the economic development.
  • The presence of buses, trains and plants can help people overcome the geographical barriers, thereby travelers can widen the scope of freedom.
  • As a result increasing number of business activities arouse, accelerating the urban growth and economic globalization.
  • The telecommunicate devices are the mainstream of recent technology, which make it easier for people to contact their families and friends.
  • It is also possible for workers to telecommute, because they can communicate with colleagues and clients to deal with the tasks on line as they were in offices, thereby they could rely less on transport.
  • These technologies not only enable people to achieve the balance between family and work commitments, but also be more environmentally friendly than earlier technologies.
  • In summarise, we have reaped benefits of using eletricity, household devices and all forms of transport.
  • But I still belived the recent techonolies such as mobile devices are more influential in modern society.

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    • It is sometime thought that advanced technology contributed more in the past than it does nowadays on people’s life.
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    • In my opinion, the effect of recent technologies is prominent, but the benefits gained from early technological should not be ignored.
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    • For instance, families can finish their household chores efficiently with the help of a variety of appliances, such as vacuums, rice cookers and washing machines.
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    • Many means of transportation have been invented in the past decades and they play important roles in enhancing the economic development.
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    • The presence of buses, trains and plants can help people overcome the geographical barriers, thereby travelers can widen the scope of freedom.
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    • As a result increasing number of business activities arouse, accelerating the urban growth and economic globalization.
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    • The telecommunicate devices are the mainstream of recent technology, which make it easier for people to contact their families and friends.
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    • It is also possible for workers to telecommute, because they can communicate with colleagues and clients to deal with the tasks on line as they were in offices, thereby they could rely less on transport.
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    • These technologies not only enable people to achieve the balance between family and work commitments, but also be more environmentally friendly than earlier technologies.
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