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  • Our customer based on people of all ages and sex , because of the modern work pressure, long working hours , people today often do not have spare time to management their bodies , our product’s conception is making people to conctrol their helth condition in anywhere, at anytime .
  • In order to do that ,we plan to be able to put our product in all the market , where we can buy plants . so that consumers can more easily and quickly to buy our products.
  • In addition, we also plan to collaborate with major hospitals to carry out charitable activities , such like creating a "plant Cancer Detection Center" , eliminating the need for traditional methods which has a complex procedures.
  • Products in the market price will be slightly higher than general plant , but most of the consumers can afford.
  • We will explain the price later in the part 3 :the cost –benefit anaysis For the design of the product ,we have make our efforts ,because we succesfully developped a variety plants for different ages, such as asparagus for the elderly , roses for the young people.
  • About the publicity , we have created a product website , 24-hour online customer service staff will answer customers’ questions , the website also has customer response column for consumers to make recommendations and share shopping experience.
  • In addition, we will publish our product information in major newspapers and health , and it will be broadcast on television publicity and other media .

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    • Our customer based on people of all ages and sex , because of the modern work pressure, long working hours , people today often do not have spare time to management their bodies , our product’s conception is making people to conctrol their helth condition in anywhere, at anytime .
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    • In order to do that ,we plan to be able to put our product in all the market , where we can buy plants . so that consumers can more easily and quickly to buy our products.
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    • In addition, we also plan to collaborate with major hospitals to carry out charitable activities , such like creating a "plant Cancer Detection Center" , eliminating the need for traditional methods which has a complex procedures.
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    • We will explain the price later in the part 3 :the cost –benefit anaysis For the design of the product ,we have make our efforts ,because we succesfully developped a variety plants for different ages, such as asparagus for the elderly , roses for the young people.
      투표하세요!
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    • About the publicity , we have created a product website , 24-hour online customer service staff will answer customers’ questions , the website also has customer response column for consumers to make recommendations and share shopping experience.
      투표하세요!
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    • In addition, we will publish our product information in major newspapers and health , and it will be broadcast on television publicity and other media .
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