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Article about homeless animals
I have some questions about the structure of the article.
For example: I don`t know how to start this article, but i am confident, that i need to interest reader from the beginning.
I have some ideas.
For example: dear reader have you ever though how to solve the problem with homeless animals in our city?
They are so unprotected.
And people are so busy and indifferent.
They are crazy about money and career.

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- Article about homeless animals
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- I have some questions about the structure of the article.
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문장 2
- For example: I don`t know how to start this article, but i am confident, that i need to interest reader from the beginning.
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문장 3
- I have some ideas.
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문장 4
- For example: dear reader have you ever though how to solve the problem with homeless animals in our city?
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- ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 4
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- They are so unprotected.
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- And people are so busy and indifferent.
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- They are crazy about money and career.
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- ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 7