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  • Please help me check a little passage about Mark Zuckerburg

  • Mark Zuckerberg is the co-founder of the social networking website Facebook who has a personal wealth of estimated $35.1 billion.
  • Had been a prodigy since a very early age, he enjoyed developing computer programs such as “ZuckNet“, which was considered a “primitive version of Instant Messenger”.
  • Besides, he excelled in science and classical studies in Phillips Exeter Academy, one of the best high schools in the U.S and later went to Harvard where he achieved perfect scores and rewards.
  • The next step that Mark would make, it seems to me, is to continue his study at Harvard, a top college, finding a well-paid job or pursuing higher education after graduation .
  • However, to many people’s surprise, he dropped out of Harvard and began working on the Facebook Project which is full of uncertainties.
  • During Mark’s arduous journey to make the world open, as he stated in 2010, a giant divergence emerged between him and some of his friends, which led to series of serious quarrels and even involved Mark in an accusation.
  • Under great pressure, he persisted and stuck to the idea of creating an open information flow for people and eventually made himself to be one of the richest men in the world.
  • Moreover, he is not the man who worships the fortune like a miser, but rather, he is benevolent and not stinted with money.
  • In total, he has devoted more than $1 billion to charity.

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    • Mark Zuckerberg is the co-founder of the social networking website Facebook who has a personal wealth of estimated $35.1 billion.
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    • Had been a prodigy since a very early age, he enjoyed developing computer programs such as “ZuckNet“, which was considered a “primitive version of Instant Messenger”.
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    • Besides, he excelled in science and classical studies in Phillips Exeter Academy, one of the best high schools in the U.S and later went to Harvard where he achieved perfect scores and rewards.
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    • The next step that Mark would make, it seems to me, is to continue his study at Harvard, a top college, finding a well-paid job or pursuing higher education after graduation .
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    • However, to many people’s surprise, he dropped out of Harvard and began working on the Facebook Project which is full of uncertainties.
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    • During Mark’s arduous journey to make the world open, as he stated in 2010, a giant divergence emerged between him and some of his friends, which led to series of serious quarrels and even involved Mark in an accusation.
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    • Under great pressure, he persisted and stuck to the idea of creating an open information flow for people and eventually made himself to be one of the richest men in the world.
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    • Moreover, he is not the man who worships the fortune like a miser, but rather, he is benevolent and not stinted with money.
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