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  • Compare and contrast the influence of family and friend on teen

  • Is it true that “Birds of a feather flock together”?
  • Can you define a person by his/her friends and family?
  • Although it is quite difficult to measure exactly how family and friends could affect on a person because of their complex and changeable structure, many studies have been carried out with a great effort to decode this mechanism.
  • Surprisingly, it is possible to recognize the impact ò family and friend on teenager’s behaviors and achievements.
  • One of the first criteria to judge a person is his/her behavior, which is noticeably formed from the interaction with family and friends.
  • A study from the National Longitudinal Study of adolescents health (AddHealth) shows that home place plays an important role in the behavior-shaping process of an adolescent.
  • The findings pointed out four main factors that lead to the acts of teenager: parental high expectation, parental presence, home environment and parental communication.
  • While the high expectation from parents can decrease teenagers’ commitment to violence, it was parents’ presence at the important moments that could prevent teenager from substance use.
  • In addition, kids who early engage in guns, tobacco and illicit substance use are highly prone to suicide, violent involvement and substance use.
  • Therefore, communication between parents and children is greatly recommended.
  • Compared to family’s impact, friends have no clear evidence in positive effect on teenagers.
  • According to Berndt and Keefe’s findings in 1995, friends influenced teens’ disruptive behavior at school.
  • However, the findings could be easily misconstrued to mean that friends had an entirely negative influence.
  • Under those circumstances, the duo prudentially specified 2 kinds of changes in which teens tend to increase or decrease their disruptive behaviors depending on their friends.
  • Another influence of friends and family that is significantly presented is teenagers’ achievement.
  • First of all, a family’s background has an impact on the adolescents achievement in the sense that, teens whose family’s backgrounds are defined by great achievements are likely to be low achievers.
  • On the contrary, if a teen is from a poor background he/she tends to achieve more than the one from the wealthy family.
  • However, parental bond in one way or another influences the achievement of teens from such backgrounds.
  • The situation could be reverse in the first scenario if the family bond is strong and the direction given to the teen is towards high achievement.
  • Second, educational methods also affect teens performance, a punitive method seems to have a negative influence on the teens performance while an appreciative method conversely encourages better achievements.
  • In terms of friend’s impact, the findings from Epstein (1983) delved on the friends’ group/collective influence which is the case that children adjust their level of achievement to have the same one with their friends.
  • Besides, the group plays a crucial role in the long run of the adolescents’ level of competitiveness.
  • The more competitive they are, the more likely they change themselves to fit in their friends.
  • Adolescents’ behaviors and achievements are influenced differently by both family and friends.
  • Family’s influence works effective if the closeness is strong enough.
  • However, the mechanism of friends’ impact is based on the group effect.
  • The influence from either family or friends results in which is either negative or positive depending on the influence itself.

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    • Although it is quite difficult to measure exactly how family and friends could affect on a person because of their complex and changeable structure, many studies have been carried out with a great effort to decode this mechanism.
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    • One of the first criteria to judge a person is his/her behavior, which is noticeably formed from the interaction with family and friends.
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    • A study from the National Longitudinal Study of adolescents health (AddHealth) shows that home place plays an important role in the behavior-shaping process of an adolescent.
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    • The findings pointed out four main factors that lead to the acts of teenager: parental high expectation, parental presence, home environment and parental communication.
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    • While the high expectation from parents can decrease teenagers’ commitment to violence, it was parents’ presence at the important moments that could prevent teenager from substance use.
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    • In addition, kids who early engage in guns, tobacco and illicit substance use are highly prone to suicide, violent involvement and substance use.
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    • Under those circumstances, the duo prudentially specified 2 kinds of changes in which teens tend to increase or decrease their disruptive behaviors depending on their friends.
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    • First of all, a family’s background has an impact on the adolescents achievement in the sense that, teens whose family’s backgrounds are defined by great achievements are likely to be low achievers.
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    • The situation could be reverse in the first scenario if the family bond is strong and the direction given to the teen is towards high achievement.
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    • Second, educational methods also affect teens performance, a punitive method seems to have a negative influence on the teens performance while an appreciative method conversely encourages better achievements.
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    • In terms of friend’s impact, the findings from Epstein (1983) delved on the friends’ group/collective influence which is the case that children adjust their level of achievement to have the same one with their friends.
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