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  • Young People Enjoy Life More Than Older People Do.

  • In my view, young people enjoy life more than older people, this is because that a young person's way of thinking is not the same thing as an older person.
  • Also the responsibilities the individual has differ from a young person to an older one, the same thing would be said for being aware about the problems that may arise in life because the vision of a young person is totally different from an old one.
  • The first reason that I believe young people dont have more responsibilities as older people do.
  • For example, when I was a kid, I used to go outisde with my friends spending good time in traveling to different places in the world, and we didn't have more concern for life and the responsiblities that is put on the neck of our parents.
  • As they would worry for providing money for us, and looking for our happiness.
  • Eventhough, that it somtimes cost them alot to cover our needs in order to be satisfied and fullfiled.
  • The secon reason is that because young people tend to have no clue of what life is about, and what's going on around them as they care only about doing whatever they like instead of looking for consequences that may result after it.
  • For instance, I remember once when I was in need to participate in an event outside of my country, and I was really yearing to be a part in it with friends.
  • My father who worked on it day and night, and prepared all the necessary papers and my passport.
  • On the other hand,I was only hanging out with my classmates and speaking about it the whole day how it's going to be.
  • It was a real great pleasure.
  • Though the entire work was done by my father, who had to stop for working for three days in order to prepare all what is necessary in order to assure that I would have a good time while being abroad.
  • And this would shows that the older people wont have much time to think about themselves, but rather they're busy fullfilling the needs of their children in order to garantee that they have a good time.
  • To conclude, when it comes to enjoying life and having the best moments ever, it would defenetly be in the young age rather than an old age.
  • And that's because of many factors as the spare time the individual have, and also the responsiblities as well.
  • And that's why I believe that young people would enjoy life more than older people.

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    • In my view, young people enjoy life more than older people, this is because that a young person's way of thinking is not the same thing as an older person.
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    • Also the responsibilities the individual has differ from a young person to an older one, the same thing would be said for being aware about the problems that may arise in life because the vision of a young person is totally different from an old one.
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    • For example, when I was a kid, I used to go outisde with my friends spending good time in traveling to different places in the world, and we didn't have more concern for life and the responsiblities that is put on the neck of our parents.
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    • The secon reason is that because young people tend to have no clue of what life is about, and what's going on around them as they care only about doing whatever they like instead of looking for consequences that may result after it.
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    • For instance, I remember once when I was in need to participate in an event outside of my country, and I was really yearing to be a part in it with friends.
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    • Though the entire work was done by my father, who had to stop for working for three days in order to prepare all what is necessary in order to assure that I would have a good time while being abroad.
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    • And this would shows that the older people wont have much time to think about themselves, but rather they're busy fullfilling the needs of their children in order to garantee that they have a good time.
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    • To conclude, when it comes to enjoying life and having the best moments ever, it would defenetly be in the young age rather than an old age.
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