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從Joodar來的文本 - English

Hi everyone ! can you correct me ? and thanks
I have waited for long time this love, Love as a bird flying in the White evening.
The success which destiny gave me , Have I found my fortune forever?
I have been searching you all my life , I have wanted to watch the lights of your eyes.
My love to you is gleaming and pure, Receive my waiting answer love .
The burn of heart is you , The brightening of young is you .
I will call you as dear and I will care of you, The burning of my love will choose you.
I want to be around you , I want to be waiting for you under moon.
To see your beauty face for a time I have come here every day

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- Hi everyone ! can you correct me ? and thanks
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- 增加一條新的校正! - 标题
句子 1
- I have waited for long time this love, Love as a bird flying in the White evening.
  赶紧投票吧！
- 增加一條新的校正! - 句子 1
句子 2
- The success which destiny gave me , Have I found my fortune forever?
  赶紧投票吧！
- 增加一條新的校正! - 句子 2
句子 3
- I have been searching you all my life , I have wanted to watch the lights of your eyes.
  赶紧投票吧！
- 增加一條新的校正! - 句子 3
句子 4
- My love to you is gleaming and pure, Receive my waiting answer love .
  赶紧投票吧！
- 增加一條新的校正! - 句子 4
句子 5
- The burn of heart is you , The brightening of young is you .
  赶紧投票吧！
- 增加一條新的校正! - 句子 5
句子 6
- I will call you as dear and I will care of you, The burning of my love will choose you.
  赶紧投票吧！
- 增加一條新的校正! - 句子 6
句子 7
- I want to be around you , I want to be waiting for you under moon.
  赶紧投票吧！
- 增加一條新的校正! - 句子 7
句子 8
- To see your beauty face for a time I have come here every day
  赶紧投票吧！
- 增加一條新的校正! - 句子 8