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Text from Eclos - English

  • Lunch box

  • To whom it may concern, I am representing company "Free Juice" and today I contact you about your Alfresh lunch box.
  • I received the description of your product and wish to invest because it is a market in full expansion.
  • I want to invest in your product because this is a market in full expansion.
  • People do not have time to go home for lunch and need to consume quickly.
  • This is very useful for children at school who can taste the store easily in the box.
  • The mother can prepare the meal the night before and the child can easily carry his lunch box.
  • The cooler allows to bring desserts and cheeses to taste.
  • There are practical compartments.
  • For children, the color is particularly important and I like the idea of a colorful and attractive lunch box.
  • This is a real advantage to attract young people.
  • In addition, this lunch box is useful for adults who want to eat quickly at work, or taste between meetings.
  • Given the simplicity of the product, I think consumers will be tempted to try it and will only adopt it!
  • I am ready to invest 200,000 dolars in your product for a stake of 25% because there are still a lot of competition and it will be worth stand out.
  • I will wish to build on the shape and appearance of the box.
  • It has to stand out from the other lunch box due to its attractive side, young, colorful, practical and modern.
  • This is the point I want to improve on your product.
  • I am charmed by your product, and I think we can make it an essential item for everyone!
  • I look forward to hearing from you soon, Yours respectfully Mark Homy

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