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Κείμενο από montanalegal - English

  • my short story

  • After nine hours of driving through San Francisco and I grew tired so, I searched for a cheap, nice motel to stay at night.
  • I found one just after the sundown.
  • The neon sign“EAST WING MOTEL” glowed near to the small, oblong building.
  • When I parked my Chevrolet Cruz the front lights illumined the naked, brick wall.
  • The park-lot was empty and the vast, pitch-dark asphalt was divide (split) with white lines that reflected the red glow of the sign, what lurked me to the promise of the lull.
  • I went to check in and take my room-key.
  • Light brown wallpapers smothered the walls and naked wooden floors bore my steps as I approached the desk.
  • The woman, standing behind the counter was about thirty-four years old.
  • Her skinny face carried a ragged expression and her lips were almost invisible.
  • She looked like a woman prison inmate, but instead of the orange prison garb she wore a dark green T-shirt.
  • We did not speak, I just handed her twenty bucks and gave my key with number sixty-four.
  • When I turned to go to my room I beheld a boy.
  • He was ten years old, and the look shocked me.
  • He looked older, then his mother.
  • At least I thought, that the woman was her mother.
  • His skin was a little wrinkled and, he was bald.
  • The circles under his eyes emphasized his serious look.
  • He stood and eyed me, as if he saw a human being for the first time in his life.
  • He fixed his gaze on me.
  • “Brandon,” his mother said, “I told you to stay in your room.” She sighed.
  • “Please go back and lay down.” I looked at her.
  • But just briefly because she avoided my sight.
  • Once in the room I sank into the bed and fell asleep right away.
  • The next day my entire body sore and my sheet stick to my skin.
  • The boy from the reception sat on the bed in a lotus position and propped his head with his hands on his knees.
  • His gaze sunk into my eyes as if he wanted to pull out my soul through them.
  • When I raised my head to look at my body, I knew immediately, why the sheet was stick to my body.
  • It soaked with blood.
  • I wanted to throw it away, but I could not move.
  • I shrieked in terror.
  • My body burned and the splash of blood just grew.
  • My gaze skipped back to the boy who gagged.
  • If I was him I'd puke as well, but then...
  • I head of snake appeared between his lips.
  • I bulged my eyes in terror when the snake slid out from the boy's mouth.
  • It traveled slowly down his neck, down his chest.
  • I watched the animal with white terror widening my pupils as it made its way toward me.
  • It curled on the bed and whisked its forked tongue.
  • It was about twenty-two inches long with sandy skin and gray patches.
  • The snake winded towards me and rattled its tail.
  • I watched the snake's horns on its head and the eyes with a narrow pupil what looked like a black grain of rice.
  • As I shrieked, the woman stormed into my room and when she saw me, she covered her mouth with her palm and shook her head in disbelief.
  • “Oh, no.” She murmured.
  • “Not again.” “What's going on!?” I cried out.
  • “Oh no.” The woman repeated her words, and she walked to me.
  • Yes she walked, not ran, nor jogged.
  • “I told you stay in your bed.” She told the boy and removed the bed sheet.
  • As she jerked it the rattlesnake slid down onto the floor.
  • I raised my head to look at my body.
  • Then I understood why I could not move.
  • I understood, but did not comprehend what I saw.
  • Thorns attached me to the bed.
  • The plant gashed into my skin and flash.
  • It looked as if it had somehow

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