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  • Phones

  • The issue at hand is smart phones are important tools or not for children.
  • This issue is very actual and important nowdays, because a lot of children have phones, it is very hard to find a child without a phone.
  • I belive that smart phones are important tools to keep in touch, and it is the better opinion, because I think that children must keep connection with their parents.
  • Smart phones as a nessecary part of children's life is preferable because they can always say where they are.
  • Once, when I was fifteen years old, I was late at my friend's, I called my mother in order to say that I was with my friend, and that she had not to worry about me.
  • Additionally, smart phones must have every child is a better opinion than the idea that it is not nessecary.
  • It is very useful there is Internet access, thus parents can control their children, and they can know what a child is interested in.
  • Once, when I was a pupil, our class prepared the play for Christmas at school.
  • At that evening I was late in my teacher's home, because I made decorations, it was already dark outside, and also it was getting rain, so I din't take an umbrella with me.
  • I sent the parents my coordinate, and they could easily to get there and took me home.
  • Ultimatelly, I feel that my choice is the correct one.
  • I believe this because it is a great way to keep in touch with your family.

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    • This issue is very actual and important nowdays, because a lot of children have phones, it is very hard to find a child without a phone.
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    • I belive that smart phones are important tools to keep in touch, and it is the better opinion, because I think that children must keep connection with their parents.
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    • Once, when I was fifteen years old, I was late at my friend's, I called my mother in order to say that I was with my friend, and that she had not to worry about me.
      투표하세요!
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    • It is very useful there is Internet access, thus parents can control their children, and they can know what a child is interested in.
      투표하세요!
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    • At that evening I was late in my teacher's home, because I made decorations, it was already dark outside, and also it was getting rain, so I din't take an umbrella with me.
      투표하세요!
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