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  • People should be more independent from modern technologies, because they can influence negatively on the ability to think.
  • Today a real problem is that a lot of people cannot remember dates, names or addresses.
  • Moreover, it is known that the yong use their phones and special applications to save important events in to-do lists.
  • If to take into account that people did not use any technologies a few years ago, it is possible to say that they could keep in their heads more information than today's people.
  • Furthermore, to rely on technology in everyday life can be the main reason, why it is getting more difficult to calculate numbers without using programmes.
  • Researchers show that more than fifty percent of students in High Schools face a problem of calculating numbers in mind.
  • But it would be unfair to say that technologies have only negative affect on people's life.
  • A lot of research works are based on big massiv of information.
  • For instance, such field as Big Data is very popular nowadays.
  • The analysis of this field can help to find answers on many actual problems, for example, changing the climate on Earth, prediction various situations, calculating previous data.
  • It would not be possible to calculate these tasks without using computers.
  • To summary, technologies are becoming an integral part of human life, more and more people rely on them.
  • But many of people do not even think, that excessive using of everyday gadgets and applications can be a real problem, because it deteriorate the ability of humans to think for themselves.

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    • People should be more independent from modern technologies, because they can influence negatively on the ability to think.
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    • Moreover, it is known that the yong use their phones and special applications to save important events in to-do lists.
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    • If to take into account that people did not use any technologies a few years ago, it is possible to say that they could keep in their heads more information than today's people.
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    • Furthermore, to rely on technology in everyday life can be the main reason, why it is getting more difficult to calculate numbers without using programmes.
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    • Researchers show that more than fifty percent of students in High Schools face a problem of calculating numbers in mind.
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    • The analysis of this field can help to find answers on many actual problems, for example, changing the climate on Earth, prediction various situations, calculating previous data.
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    • But many of people do not even think, that excessive using of everyday gadgets and applications can be a real problem, because it deteriorate the ability of humans to think for themselves.
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