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  • Woven baskets

  • The given argument concludes that so-called Palean baskets, which have been recently discovered nearby Palea in the Lithos village, were not uniquely Palean.
  • According to the given evidence, this argument sounds logically on the face of it, but on the other hand, many additional evidences are required to appropriate assess the validity of this argument.
  • Initially, the argument points out that any Palean boats have not been found, thus people from Palea could not cross the river.
  • However, the author claims to hastily that the Palean people had no boats.
  • It is unclear that maybe these archaeologists are still exploring that location with the aim to find these boats.
  • It also can be said that even if none of boats will not be found, it doesn’t mean that the Palean people could not cross the river.
  • Perhaps, at that time they might not have necessary skills and knowledge to build a boat.
  • There might be another evidence of their ability to cross the river, for example, huge parts of trees, the remains of axes and ropes.
  • Besides, without other additional findings, it is possible to claim that people from Palea could communicate with people from Lithos.
  • The author also says that the Brim River is very deep and broad, that is why people could not cross it without the aid of boats.
  • There is no evidence supporting the fact that this river was the same in the prehistoric time.
  • There is high probability that due to different reasons the river could be smaller and shallower.
  • In order if the Brim River was not big as nowadays, people from Palea could easily cross it.
  • For instance, they might swim across the river.
  • Ultimately, if people had no chance to cross it, the author didn't take into account such variant as trade at that time.
  • It can be assumed that people in Palea had trade connections with any other tribe, and this tribe could buy these Palean baskets from the Palean people.
  • In its turn, people from another tribe could have an opportunity cross this river and sell the Palean baskets in the Lithos village.
  • In conclusion, it is necessary to have other additional evidences to get a complete understanding of strengths and weaknesses of the article.
  • In this case, it would be great to give more information about researchers in that area and also things found by archaeologists there.
  • The useful information would be data about the Brim River, and how it has changed since the prehistoric time.
  • Also it is important to give information about an opportunity of trade in Palea.
  • Without additional evidence, however, one should be especially wary about accepting the truth of the argument’s conclusion.

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    • The given argument concludes that so-called Palean baskets, which have been recently discovered nearby Palea in the Lithos village, were not uniquely Palean.
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    • According to the given evidence, this argument sounds logically on the face of it, but on the other hand, many additional evidences are required to appropriate assess the validity of this argument.
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    • Initially, the argument points out that any Palean boats have not been found, thus people from Palea could not cross the river.
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    • It is unclear that maybe these archaeologists are still exploring that location with the aim to find these boats.
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    • It also can be said that even if none of boats will not be found, it doesn’t mean that the Palean people could not cross the river.
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    • There might be another evidence of their ability to cross the river, for example, huge parts of trees, the remains of axes and ropes.
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    • Besides, without other additional findings, it is possible to claim that people from Palea could communicate with people from Lithos.
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    • The author also says that the Brim River is very deep and broad, that is why people could not cross it without the aid of boats.
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    • Ultimately, if people had no chance to cross it, the author didn't take into account such variant as trade at that time.
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    • It can be assumed that people in Palea had trade connections with any other tribe, and this tribe could buy these Palean baskets from the Palean people.
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    • In its turn, people from another tribe could have an opportunity cross this river and sell the Palean baskets in the Lithos village.
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    • In conclusion, it is necessary to have other additional evidences to get a complete understanding of strengths and weaknesses of the article.
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    • In this case, it would be great to give more information about researchers in that area and also things found by archaeologists there.
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    • Without additional evidence, however, one should be especially wary about accepting the truth of the argument’s conclusion.
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