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  • Place would you like to visit?

  • In my view, almost everyone likes traveling and I am not an exception.
  • I have visited a lot of places of interest.
  • But if someone asked me what famous place I would like to visit, I would answer Australia.
  • This country has a large number of unique species of different animals, which you cannot find anywhere on our planet, for example penguins, koalas, and a lot of parrots.
  • I am interested to see these animals in their natural environment.
  • At the same time I am care about the ecological situation, and I think that it would be great if all people think more about the environment.
  • As for me, I want to visit this country not only as a traveler, but as a participant of the special organization.
  • The project of this organization is directed to students and the young all around the world.
  • And the main goal is to support the population of rare species of birds in this area.
  • Thus, I will have an opportunity not only to see the place, which I would like to visit, but also the chance to help.
  • Another reason why I want to see this country is that the English language is the official language of this country.
  • I think that it would be a great practice for my English.
  • During my participation in this program I will be able to improve my speaking skills, because I will have to speak English all the time.
  • Thus, despite the fact that I have visited a lot of countries, I am interested in visiting Australia.
  • First is that my English will be better, because I have some speaking problems.
  • The second thing, it is just a great place to be in, because there is unique nature and exotic animals, but what is more important is the fact that I would like not only to enjoy this beauty, but I would also like helping animals, taking part in the special project for students.

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    • This country has a large number of unique species of different animals, which you cannot find anywhere on our planet, for example penguins, koalas, and a lot of parrots.
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    • At the same time I am care about the ecological situation, and I think that it would be great if all people think more about the environment.
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    • As for me, I want to visit this country not only as a traveler, but as a participant of the special organization.
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    • Thus, I will have an opportunity not only to see the place, which I would like to visit, but also the chance to help.
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    • Another reason why I want to see this country is that the English language is the official language of this country.
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    • During my participation in this program I will be able to improve my speaking skills, because I will have to speak English all the time.
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    • The second thing, it is just a great place to be in, because there is unique nature and exotic animals, but what is more important is the fact that I would like not only to enjoy this beauty, but I would also like helping animals, taking part in the special project for students.
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