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  • fashion industry

  • The fashion industry is responsible for illnesses such as bulimia and anorexia.
  • Over the course of many decades, the fashion industry has gained worldwide media attention regarding their perception of beauty, especially when it comes to the weight of the model.
  • According to NEDA, or the "National Eating Disorders Association", there are many psychological factors that may contribute to eating disorders, such as low self-esteem or depression and anxiety.
  • In addition, the National Association of Anorexia Nervosa and Associated Disorders (ANAD) reports that 47% of girls from grades 5-12 claim that magazines influence their decision to lose weight So, while the fashion industry may not be the direct cause of eating disorders, their presentation of too-skinny models can help trigger weight issues among those who already suffer from the psychological factors that contribute to the likelihood of developing an eating disorder.
  • A quick browse through various social media websites such as Twitter or Facebook will show just how prevalent the weight issue is in the fashion industry.
  • In conclusion, the fashion industry could be responsible but the social patterns in order to individual goals, success, despite the rest, are also guilty.

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    • Over the course of many decades, the fashion industry has gained worldwide media attention regarding their perception of beauty, especially when it comes to the weight of the model.
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    • According to NEDA, or the "National Eating Disorders Association", there are many psychological factors that may contribute to eating disorders, such as low self-esteem or depression and anxiety.
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    • In addition, the National Association of Anorexia Nervosa and Associated Disorders (ANAD) reports that 47% of girls from grades 5-12 claim that magazines influence their decision to lose weight So, while the fashion industry may not be the direct cause of eating disorders, their presentation of too-skinny models can help trigger weight issues among those who already suffer from the psychological factors that contribute to the likelihood of developing an eating disorder.
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    • A quick browse through various social media websites such as Twitter or Facebook will show just how prevalent the weight issue is in the fashion industry.
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    • In conclusion, the fashion industry could be responsible but the social patterns in order to individual goals, success, despite the rest, are also guilty.
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