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  • Futur of my city

  • In my city there is a long big wall without anything above.
  • It is grey and sad.
  • This wall faces a park of game for children.
  • To give some brightness to this place, I imagine an immense graffiti, which would represent children and their toys according to the times.
  • Like that the playing young people in parks will know how played the children of their age there are decades.
  • Quite to the left, a little boy and a girl play ossicles, they illustrate 1950s.
  • A little more to the right, another boy draws on a magic screen, this one represents 1960s In the left of this one it finds a girl who concerns her younger brother knees, she amuses him with playmobil, quite two illustrate 1970s In the middle of the graffiti, a girl tries to end sound of cubic rubik, she represents 1980s.
  • Then 1990s come, two young boys play with cars telecommanded to the right of the girl, there is one red and a blue.
  • A little more to the right, a boy and a girl play everything them two their game boy advance, console which dates 2000s.
  • The colors of the most distant years would be more mat, then by going towards the right, colors would be more and more lively!
  • There is still space after 2010s, to be able to represent the new years.
  • Every drawing, every year is painted by another artist, the styles are any various, what gives some more of life to the work.
  • This graffiti would grow in time which passes.

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  • câu 4
    • To give some brightness to this place, I imagine an immense graffiti, which would represent children and their toys according to the times.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4
  • câu 5
    • Like that the playing young people in parks will know how played the children of their age there are decades.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5
  • câu 6
  • câu 7
    • A little more to the right, another boy draws on a magic screen, this one represents 1960s In the left of this one it finds a girl who concerns her younger brother knees, she amuses him with playmobil, quite two illustrate 1970s In the middle of the graffiti, a girl tries to end sound of cubic rubik, she represents 1980s.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7
  • câu 8
    • Then 1990s come, two young boys play with cars telecommanded to the right of the girl, there is one red and a blue.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8
  • câu 9
    • A little more to the right, a boy and a girl play everything them two their game boy advance, console which dates 2000s.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9
  • câu 10
    • The colors of the most distant years would be more mat, then by going towards the right, colors would be more and more lively!
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10
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    • Every drawing, every year is painted by another artist, the styles are any various, what gives some more of life to the work.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12
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