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  • She is a wealthy middle-aged woman, who probably likes to show off her dressmaker’s experienced hands.
  • So, what I have for her is this: a black dress which is shorter in the front and decorated by a magenta and golden floral motive at the high of her hips, and also a pair of matching black heels.
  • The election of these colours it is not casual: the golden flowers stand for her ambition of money which will lead her to his death, represented by the black fabric and the red flowers.
  • As accessories she will wear a greyish pearl necklace, pearl earrings and a diamond ring; these represent the wrecks of her shrinking wealth.
  • She has a curly silvery hair and uses a natural makeup combined with a strong red lipstick.
  • The red lips here are very significant, because she will die by drinking her own poison, so again we have this colour meaning blood and death.
  • Robert Really: A professional that deals with mystery, must have an enigmatic style.
  • We want his outfit to make people rapidly understand he is a detective, so in order to achieve this, we are going to appeal to audience’s collective imaginary of what a genuine sleuth must look like.
  • He works outside, in the dark cold night, so nothing fits him better than a black gabardine and trousers which will not just keep him warm, but also will camouflage him in between night’s shadows.
  • Under the gabardine, he wears a white t-shirt and a black tie, and a shine pair of black shoes.
  • This formal style symbolise his seriousness and calculating way of thinking.
  • Accessories and props such as: a deerstalker, a wood pipe, a loupe and white gloves will relate to classic characters of the detective genre, like Sherlock Homes.
  • Juliet Sharman: Juliet is in her twenties, even though she seems to be a bit immature.
  • She has a tamed attitude and fells repressed, probably because her authoritarian mother.
  • To show this features, she is going to wear a white and pink striped dress and pink flat shoes, an outfit a bit childish for a girl of her age.
  • The colours represent her immatureness and apparent innocence, and the lines on her dress symbolize that she is going to end up behind bars.
  • At the end of the play we discover her evil side, which is going to be symbolised in the figure of an black heart pendant necklace, inside which she will keep the poison.
  • She has black straight hair and she wears natural makeup with lipgloss.
  • Shelby Sylvester: He is Robert Ralley’s loyal assistant.
  • He looks up to Robert and wants to be like him, however he sill has a lot to learn.
  • He is going to wear a grey three piece suit, a bowler hat and a pair of black shoes.
  • On stage the actor should wear this outfit in a sort of sloppy way, in order to reflect his inexperience and clumsiness.
  • Two props he will carry around all the time are going to be his ringed note book and his pen.
  • Willian Evert: He is a cheerful business man, who likes to dress in a more casual way.
  • So he is going to wear a white shirt, red troursers with suspenders, black patent-leather shoes, a black beret and he also has a thin moustache.
  • Some props he is going to use are: at the beigining of the play he will appear in a black gabardine and an umbrella and later on he also he will play a Spanish guitar.
  • This simple outfit reflects his warm relaxed humour yet elegant.
  • Madison Trigg: As Zoe Sharman, Madison is a wealthy woman who is going to show her fancy attire off.
  • She wears a superb purple long dress with a silvery belt and a maching purple heels.
  • She has an abundant makeup with lilac lipstick and eye shadow.
  • She wears a gold necklace and a sophisticated fan.

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