सुधार

Text from 1_Dimon - English

  • Attempt 1

  • According to surveys - all of us are human beings and likely ability of socialize and communicate have been aligning to our nature, since a mankind was born.
  • Tools of communication, like verbal and oral interaction skills , have been polishing and constantly honing since our foundation time.
  • Vast innovations in area of media, evidently affects on utilized humankind's methods of receiving information.
  • People produces wide steps forward in technician areas as well as in methods of communication and receiving information.
  • The conceptions as a trade, a market shoves generation to fully immerse into era of TV and Internet devices of advertisement, which are meanwhile gradually has been substituting obsolete values as direct contact.
  • I can say it shoves or displaces them.
  • In my view, spelling that TV destroyed communication is profoundly hyperbolized.
  • For the pointed question, I rather make a rephrase like "Tv changes communication style".
  • With accepting a idea of proverb " Who posses information, posses world", 21 century let us pursuing the inexorable race for cultivating idols of digesting a ton of information, worshipping to the ratio between number word's received and time spent for this process.
  • Therefore, such as created properties upbrings in people intension to absorb data using TV, Internet, because for obtaining those information we can spend less energy and even do not need to go out from place of living.
  • However, simultaneously with this frame, we are nurturing a process of asserting more and more periods without live contact and waste a less time in participation in a real negotiation.
  • It lets the vital conversation stands behind technologies and progress .
  • Also, I believe that with time passed by, humankind settled and bounded things, that brings comfort condition and provide us with information.
  • Actually, I premise that the substitution TV with real communication would not look affordable for several people.
  • Habit of wasting less power in order to obtain more information has been already plugged into algorithm of our actions and there is nothing to be astonished of.
  • Mankind consumes the crops of nature's law, and we should work with facts, neither neglect and complain about them.
  • For example, avoiding TV also impels us stay in stress and anxious after work day.
  • At least some part of brain periodically persuades us for applying new and peculiar type of leisure, and for some of us contemplation a TV screen in abundance of information flows is the most relaxing thing.
  • By the way of conclusion, I am being up with the phrase "TV kills communication", but almost the situation needs to be rephrased "TV changed style of communication and receiving information".
  • Obviously, we bumped with circumstances of invention plenty electronically devices that are devoted to make our life easier, making our existence serenely.
  • In 21 century, Mankind is aimed and compelled with intention of gathering data about environment due to reducing the time and delays among real connections.
  • And specifically for this ambient state, TV, and social media sphere in generally, accelerates information's consume process.
  • The process of renovation walks with destroying obsolete methods of past mankind interaction, through replacing and revealing new sources and dimensions for development.

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  • Vakya 1
    • According to surveys - all of us are human beings and likely ability of socialize and communicate have been aligning to our nature, since a mankind was born.
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  • Vakya 2
    • Tools of communication, like verbal and oral interaction skills , have been polishing and constantly honing since our foundation time.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 2
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  • Vakya 4
    • People produces wide steps forward in technician areas as well as in methods of communication and receiving information.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 4
  • Vakya 5
    • The conceptions as a trade, a market shoves generation to fully immerse into era of TV and Internet devices of advertisement, which are meanwhile gradually has been substituting obsolete values as direct contact.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 5
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  • Vakya 9
    • With accepting a idea of proverb " Who posses information, posses world", 21 century let us pursuing the inexorable race for cultivating idols of digesting a ton of information, worshipping to the ratio between number word's received and time spent for this process.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 9
  • Vakya 10
    • Therefore, such as created properties upbrings in people intension to absorb data using TV, Internet, because for obtaining those information we can spend less energy and even do not need to go out from place of living.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 10
  • Vakya 11
    • However, simultaneously with this frame, we are nurturing a process of asserting more and more periods without live contact and waste a less time in participation in a real negotiation.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 11
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  • Vakya 13
    • Also, I believe that with time passed by, humankind settled and bounded things, that brings comfort condition and provide us with information.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 13ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 13
  • Vakya 14
  • Vakya 15
    • Habit of wasting less power in order to obtain more information has been already plugged into algorithm of our actions and there is nothing to be astonished of.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 15ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 15
  • Vakya 16
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  • Vakya 18
    • At least some part of brain periodically persuades us for applying new and peculiar type of leisure, and for some of us contemplation a TV screen in abundance of information flows is the most relaxing thing.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 18ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 18
  • Vakya 19
    • By the way of conclusion, I am being up with the phrase "TV kills communication", but almost the situation needs to be rephrased "TV changed style of communication and receiving information".
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 19ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 19
  • Vakya 20
    • Obviously, we bumped with circumstances of invention plenty electronically devices that are devoted to make our life easier, making our existence serenely.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 20ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 20
  • Vakya 21
    • In 21 century, Mankind is aimed and compelled with intention of gathering data about environment due to reducing the time and delays among real connections.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 21ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 21
  • Vakya 22
    • And specifically for this ambient state, TV, and social media sphere in generally, accelerates information's consume process.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 22ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 22
  • Vakya 23
    • The process of renovation walks with destroying obsolete methods of past mankind interaction, through replacing and revealing new sources and dimensions for development.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 23ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Vakya 23