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  • I am not a religionist person at all and I am really worry about my countrymen ‘s superstition beliefs , as far as I know If we want to get a sophisticated and developed country in the world ,we have to put away our ancient superstition beliefs and dogmatic ideas .
  • In 15 years ago ,I and my family came to Tehran to live because my father got new job there so I finished whole my high school times in Tehran in Physic and Mathematic course .
  • While high school period ,I was interestingly learning English language in a famous language institute .The reason why I accepted as a tourist guide in Tehran was because I could success to speak English so fluently ,It was a amazing experience to communicate with foreign tourist through a traditional cultural city .This part time job was so profitable for an 17 years old young man .My passion for learning English was really high so that was the main reason why I wanted to start studying English at university but my father who had encouraged me in learning English dissuaded me from my influential intention ,so he was such a person who wanted to control all things and I was always suffered terriblely from his unfair actions ,as far as I know , he thought that I am not able at all to make decision for myself .According to my personal experiences I will never be such as a dad who my father was before .
  • While I was studying at university I was working as a industrial drawer and I was not completely independent of my father so he was paying my university charge .Actually I hated going military service so as far as I graduated ,I bought immediately my military service legally what was possible that time because of our country ‘s recession so that was why I advanced my two years life time , then I got the meaning of “money talk “ which caused more convenience ,pleasure , reputation , respect and so on .One things that assisted exactly me to work with updated machinery and for foreign companies was definitely my English knowledge ,So I will encourage and teach my children to learn at least English language which is absolutely essential to use in the modern world .
  • When I was 24 , one of the most event in my whole life happened was my marriage that I picked my wife totally by myself and my father was as regular completely disagree with my choice so he tried to dissuade me but finally I did not let him anymore interference , as result I got the next life tip which taught me that I have to fight strongly for all my desires then I will eventually achieve them .

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  • Sentence 1
    • I am not a religionist person at all and I am really worry about my countrymen ‘s superstition beliefs , as far as I know If we want to get a sophisticated and developed country in the world ,we have to put away our ancient superstition beliefs and dogmatic ideas .
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  • Sentence 2
    • In 15 years ago ,I and my family came to Tehran to live because my father got new job there so I finished whole my high school times in Tehran in Physic and Mathematic course .
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  • Sentence 3
    • While high school period ,I was interestingly learning English language in a famous language institute .The reason why I accepted as a tourist guide in Tehran was because I could success to speak English so fluently ,It was a amazing experience to communicate with foreign tourist through a traditional cultural city .This part time job was so profitable for an 17 years old young man .My passion for learning English was really high so that was the main reason why I wanted to start studying English at university but my father who had encouraged me in learning English dissuaded me from my influential intention ,so he was such a person who wanted to control all things and I was always suffered terriblely from his unfair actions ,as far as I know , he thought that I am not able at all to make decision for myself .According to my personal experiences I will never be such as a dad who my father was before .
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  • Sentence 4
    • While I was studying at university I was working as a industrial drawer and I was not completely independent of my father so he was paying my university charge .Actually I hated going military service so as far as I graduated ,I bought immediately my military service legally what was possible that time because of our country ‘s recession so that was why I advanced my two years life time , then I got the meaning of “money talk “ which caused more convenience ,pleasure , reputation , respect and so on .One things that assisted exactly me to work with updated machinery and for foreign companies was definitely my English knowledge ,So I will encourage and teach my children to learn at least English language which is absolutely essential to use in the modern world .
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  • Sentence 5
    • When I was 24 , one of the most event in my whole life happened was my marriage that I picked my wife totally by myself and my father was as regular completely disagree with my choice so he tried to dissuade me but finally I did not let him anymore interference , as result I got the next life tip which taught me that I have to fight strongly for all my desires then I will eventually achieve them .
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