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I would like buying a game computer game.
Hi my friend, It was so nice to hear from you.
Firstly, I think like your parents but also I think you can buy your favourite computer games.
Saving is very important!
Secondly, you must save some money because you'll pay your futures studies; you'll have to buy a house when you're older and when you're retired you'll must pay all your things with your own money.
Moreover, I can help you to buy the game so I know a website where all things are cheaper than other places.
I hope you all have a great weekend.

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- I would like buying a game computer game.
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문장 1
- Hi my friend, It was so nice to hear from you.
  투표하세요!
- ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 1
문장 2
- Firstly, I think like your parents but also I think you can buy your favourite computer games.
  투표하세요!
- ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 2
문장 3
- Saving is very important!
  투표하세요!
- ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 3
문장 4
- Secondly, you must save some money because you'll pay your futures studies; you'll have to buy a house when you're older and when you're retired you'll must pay all your things with your own money.
  투표하세요!
- ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 4
문장 5
- Moreover, I can help you to buy the game so I know a website where all things are cheaper than other places.
  투표하세요!
- ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 5
문장 6
- I hope you all have a great weekend.
  투표하세요!
- ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6