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I want to get a holiday job
Hi Michael, It was so nice to hear from you.
Firstly, you're 23 years old and you should think in search working to live with your girlfriend and your sons.
Therefore you should start to work already.
Secondly, you must work in any job due to the economy is very bad.
When you get a job, you'll feel better and you will can rent a house and pay all your expenses.
When I was 23, I was in the same situation so I can advice you.
I'm sure you will get everything you need.
I hope you have a great weekend.

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- Hi Michael, It was so nice to hear from you.
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- Firstly, you're 23 years old and you should think in search working to live with your girlfriend and your sons.
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- Therefore you should start to work already.
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- Secondly, you must work in any job due to the economy is very bad.
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- When you get a job, you'll feel better and you will can rent a house and pay all your expenses.
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- When I was 23, I was in the same situation so I can advice you.
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- I'm sure you will get everything you need.
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- I hope you have a great weekend.
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