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Hi!

I tried to write a love poem and I wanna ask you if you would be so kind and spend few minutes correcting it :) btw: this is my first poem ever ______________________________ At the time I had seen you first, a foreign energy has formed an outburst.

When the world around me felt surreal, great bells in my chest began to peal.

The bells have been singing for the ages, so the sound reached the furthest places.

Before I could even realise what had happened, my virgin heart has already been widely opened.

Your bells have hit me so I fell to the ground, and from that time our bells are irreversibly bound.

As I'm standing here entirely devotedly, I'm ultimately sure I love you inevitably.