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  • Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it or is it bett

  • Money became an inherent and essential part of our life today.
  • Nowadays people can buy whether they want and spend money on desirable things.
  • Although, some people are accomplished to enjoy money while earning, personally, I prefer invest my money for the future, because I am sure it will bring more valuable return.
  • First of all, I try to save my money, because this way I can buy the one I really need even if it is quite expensive.
  • Travelling is a kind of thing I am fond of, but very often it requires a lot of money, especially if I travel abroad.
  • The only outcome from this situation is to build my budget for future trips by saving money beforehand.
  • Moreover, the money which I saved may be spent with cleverness in the future.
  • I remember myself amassing my money for future education.
  • I dreamed to enter the university in another city that was far away from my home.
  • To study there it was necessary to pay not only for my education, but also for a flat, textbooks and food there.
  • One more thing is that saving money helps me to avoid spending it on senseless purchases.
  • I have a habit to buy a lot of clothes spontaneously.
  • And the problem is that I do not wear it later.
  • Saving money, I feel the value of my money.
  • Also, I see how difficult it to accumulate and how quickly money usually can be spent on silly products.
  • Thus, there is another approach which is spending money while earning it; I am used to another way.
  • Saving my money allows me to spend it on things I need, to spend on expensive things I cannot afford at once, and this way I may manage money in a more proper way.

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