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  • II.University (it's for an important oral exam)

  • (Hi everyone, please pay attention to this text, it's really important for me :) I'd like to thank you if you correct it.
  • It would be really nice of you, it's the second part of my oral, the debate of the day will be in the entrance to American universities.) (...) The university returns very expensive to the students, they are forced to borrow , to ask for help to their families or obliged to take a job parallely to their studies to be able to pay it .
  • We studied a text where we've found the chronologic description of the different jobs of Crystal a student who work hard to be able to study at university .
  • We remarked that at the end of her fourth year of university she worked 60 hours per week among which the 12 hours of classes.
  • In despite of the small jobs apart from university, the students cannot always pay it,here intervenes a medley of help from their entourage,a work from their job and some luck .
  • For it they thus have to be very motivated , perseverant and they must have a good sense of autonomy.
  • For example Crystal was intended to have several jobs because she didn't want to ask a lot of help to her parents .
  • She had a financial help from her family (grants) .
  • They also offered her the money from their loans, a graduation present.

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    • (Hi everyone, please pay attention to this text, it's really important for me :) I'd like to thank you if you correct it.
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    • It would be really nice of you, it's the second part of my oral, the debate of the day will be in the entrance to American universities.) (...) The university returns very expensive to the students, they are forced to borrow , to ask for help to their families or obliged to take a job parallely to their studies to be able to pay it .
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    • We studied a text where we've found the chronologic description of the different jobs of Crystal a student who work hard to be able to study at university .
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    • We remarked that at the end of her fourth year of university she worked 60 hours per week among which the 12 hours of classes.
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    • In despite of the small jobs apart from university, the students cannot always pay it,here intervenes a medley of help from their entourage,a work from their job and some luck .
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    • For example Crystal was intended to have several jobs because she didn't want to ask a lot of help to her parents .
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