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  • HOW TECHNOLOGY CAN CREATE OPPORTUNITIES FOR CRIMINALS AND ALSO

  • The purpose of this essay is to show you how technology can affect our life; in some cases tech promotes opportunities for criminals, in others prevents the crime.
  • First of all, in this day and age people use internet everything everywhere, but it is not known exactly how to protect us.
  • For instance we do not close our webcam, we use easy password such as the pet’s name, simple figures, etc. On top of that we buy with credit card on insecure way on internet.
  • Nevertheless, technology is not unfriendly.
  • There are certain advantages to using technology.
  • Mainly technology can protect us in our homes, for example with surveillance cameras which they are connect with the police.
  • In addition technology and ICT are significant work tools for the police in order to solve all cases.
  • As you can see there are pros and drawbacks in the use of technology, but let is face it, technology is here in order to stay.
  • That is why, the more aware of the use you are, the safer you are.

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    • The purpose of this essay is to show you how technology can affect our life; in some cases tech promotes opportunities for criminals, in others prevents the crime.
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    • First of all, in this day and age people use internet everything everywhere, but it is not known exactly how to protect us.
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    • For instance we do not close our webcam, we use easy password such as the pet’s name, simple figures, etc. On top of that we buy with credit card on insecure way on internet.
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    • Mainly technology can protect us in our homes, for example with surveillance cameras which they are connect with the police.
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    • As you can see there are pros and drawbacks in the use of technology, but let is face it, technology is here in order to stay.
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