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  • There are different opinions in regard to the question of whether people should perform regular fitness trainings.
  • While modern humanity prefer to devote a lot of time on workout, this is often considered unimportant by society, ignored obvious insufficient physical development of the contemporary population.
  • In contrast, this essay will put forward the notion that this trend is undoubtedly positive.
  • First, this position will be proven by an analysis of the quality life of amateur athletes.
  • A discussion of the social and personal benefits for the individuals who are periodically attend sport gyms will also support the view stated above.
  • First of all, the main reason why workouts are beneficial for both children and adults is that participating in sport activities improves general well-being.
  • Also, it accelerates the metabolism that helps to get rid of excess weight and strengthens the muscles, including the cardiac.
  • Looking into the future, it is quite evident that the possession of a sporty, physically developed body will positively affect the mental state of the individual, highly increasing the quality of life.
  • Not only can the sport games be helpful for human in case of corporal development, but they can also promote socialization, as well as the acquisition of different skills that are probably could be useful in everyday life.
  • Looking from the other point of view, it is not possible not to agree that in pursuit of a beautiful body or sports results, some individuals will resort to various tricks to achieve the desired result as soon as possible.
  • It is supposed that in this case a temptation to apply anabolic steroids, doping drug, hormonal growth stimulant and others, most of which are forbidden means, could occur.
  • In conclusion, I am convinced that the increasing popularity of fitness trainings and sport games is a positive trend in circumstances that the attitude of people to training will be responsible.
  • Also, in the modern world, deprived of the necessary amount of physical loads, playing sport is an indispensable factor for achieving a high level of quality of life.

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    • There are different opinions in regard to the question of whether people should perform regular fitness trainings.
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    • While modern humanity prefer to devote a lot of time on workout, this is often considered unimportant by society, ignored obvious insufficient physical development of the contemporary population.
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    • A discussion of the social and personal benefits for the individuals who are periodically attend sport gyms will also support the view stated above.
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    • First of all, the main reason why workouts are beneficial for both children and adults is that participating in sport activities improves general well-being.
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    • Also, it accelerates the metabolism that helps to get rid of excess weight and strengthens the muscles, including the cardiac.
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    • Looking into the future, it is quite evident that the possession of a sporty, physically developed body will positively affect the mental state of the individual, highly increasing the quality of life.
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    • Not only can the sport games be helpful for human in case of corporal development, but they can also promote socialization, as well as the acquisition of different skills that are probably could be useful in everyday life.
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    • Looking from the other point of view, it is not possible not to agree that in pursuit of a beautiful body or sports results, some individuals will resort to various tricks to achieve the desired result as soon as possible.
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    • It is supposed that in this case a temptation to apply anabolic steroids, doping drug, hormonal growth stimulant and others, most of which are forbidden means, could occur.
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    • In conclusion, I am convinced that the increasing popularity of fitness trainings and sport games is a positive trend in circumstances that the attitude of people to training will be responsible.
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    • Also, in the modern world, deprived of the necessary amount of physical loads, playing sport is an indispensable factor for achieving a high level of quality of life.
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