添削

添削のお手伝いをしましょう！未修正

ciao46からのテキスト - English

  • An invented story

  • My name is Liz, but it could have been Hilary or Lynne.
  • My story is difficult to tell, I only did it with my best friend Karen, because in her heart there is my same sad and melancholy that there is in mine.
  • I don't have memory of my mother sobered, but I have some memories that make me smile when I think back on.
  • I remember one time, my mother sold all my toys to buy alchool.
  • She was only able to buy a sack of potatos with the remaining money, and we had no choise but eat potatos for three consecutive days.
  • Sometimes She'd go to the pub forgetting to pick me up at school.
  • The school was the most pleasant time of the day for me.
  • Anyway it was at school where I relaized that my life was different from the other ones.
  • I didn't get my snack ready by my mother.
  • On the contrary I was in charge of cooking, doing houseworks and bringing up my younger brother.
  • No adult helped me or was there for listening to me.
  • I decided not have kids for fear of making the same mistakes of my mother.
  • After all I have her same genes.
  • I play sports because I feel I need a strong structured body, and I try to keep my house cosy and welcoming, that is the opposite of the house where I grew up in.

添削の手助けをお願いします！ - English