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  • Music in a modern world

  • The two texts deal with the issue of music being underrated in our modern world.
  • As was outlined in the first text, music is everywhere, in ads, supermarkets, and most people do not pay attention to it anymore.
  • The ones who could provide us with high-quality music, professional musicians, cannot make ends meet due to lack of financial means and support from institutions.
  • They are forced to abandon music because they cannot sustain themselves.
  • Further proof of this is the fact that music is less and less taught at schools and notconsidered as important as the main subjects.
  • Yet research shows that children could benefit from learning to play an instrument, from a cognitive and behavioral point of view.
  • It would help them socialize and learn how to work in a team.
  • While both texts make a point by arguing that music is losing the sacred quality it had in the past, they are exaggerating its degrade.
  • Listening to music is still widely popular, especially with young people, and was made possible with many devices that let you take your music everywhere you go.
  • Tickets for concert venues and opera halls are always sold out, popular singers are more famous than the Pope, new groups emerge every day.
  • Music is very much alive but has taken new forms, and can now be made at home with a computer and broadcasted to a world-wide audience.
  • It has never been so easy to listen to music in all of human history.

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    • As was outlined in the first text, music is everywhere, in ads, supermarkets, and most people do not pay attention to it anymore.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 2
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    • The ones who could provide us with high-quality music, professional musicians, cannot make ends meet due to lack of financial means and support from institutions.
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    • Further proof of this is the fact that music is less and less taught at schools and notconsidered as important as the main subjects.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 5
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    • Yet research shows that children could benefit from learning to play an instrument, from a cognitive and behavioral point of view.
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    • While both texts make a point by arguing that music is losing the sacred quality it had in the past, they are exaggerating its degrade.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 8
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    • Listening to music is still widely popular, especially with young people, and was made possible with many devices that let you take your music everywhere you go.
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    • Tickets for concert venues and opera halls are always sold out, popular singers are more famous than the Pope, new groups emerge every day.
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  • 문장 11
    • Music is very much alive but has taken new forms, and can now be made at home with a computer and broadcasted to a world-wide audience.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 11
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