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  • In his article "Risk-takers: Who are they?" (2011), which can be found in the "Current Directions in Psychological Science" (Vol.20,Issue 4), Charlie Wittman argues that the personality trait of being risk-taker depends on biological, psychological, age and gender factors.
  • According to the writer some people are more risk-taking than others because they have few active receptors to control the level of dopamine received.
  • To support his argument, wittman gives evidence of a research of the Vanderbuilt University of Nashville and Albert Einstein College of Medicine of New York on a group of men and women (The Journal of Neuroscience, 2008).
  • As regards psychological reasons, Wittman states that "sensation-seeking is a personality trait that describes the desire to find activities that bring us pleasure" (Zuckerman, 1964).
  • What is more, according to a study of Zuckerman (2007) the 60% of the risk-taking personality trait is probably inherited by our parents.
  • Another aspect that has influence on our personality is age.
  • The writer of the article declares that people until the age of 25 have a tendency to take more risky behaviours instead of adults.
  • Clearly it is due to the development of our pre-frontal cortex, that is the part of our brain that controls our actions (Giedd, 2008).To conclude, a further important aspect is gender.
  • A research of the Columbia Business School in the U.S.
  • (2011) reports that financial risks are typical of men, while women tend to take social risks.
  • However, despite these results, both men and women have a different perception of a situation, because they have a different experience background.

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    • In his article "Risk-takers: Who are they?" (2011), which can be found in the "Current Directions in Psychological Science" (Vol.20,Issue 4), Charlie Wittman argues that the personality trait of being risk-taker depends on biological, psychological, age and gender factors.
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    • According to the writer some people are more risk-taking than others because they have few active receptors to control the level of dopamine received.
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    • To support his argument, wittman gives evidence of a research of the Vanderbuilt University of Nashville and Albert Einstein College of Medicine of New York on a group of men and women (The Journal of Neuroscience, 2008).
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    • As regards psychological reasons, Wittman states that "sensation-seeking is a personality trait that describes the desire to find activities that bring us pleasure" (Zuckerman, 1964).
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    • What is more, according to a study of Zuckerman (2007) the 60% of the risk-taking personality trait is probably inherited by our parents.
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    • The writer of the article declares that people until the age of 25 have a tendency to take more risky behaviours instead of adults.
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    • Clearly it is due to the development of our pre-frontal cortex, that is the part of our brain that controls our actions (Giedd, 2008).To conclude, a further important aspect is gender.
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    • However, despite these results, both men and women have a different perception of a situation, because they have a different experience background.
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