Korreksies

Text from luca_cappe - English

  • Letter to a newspaper Editor

  • Estimated Prof. Tratt, I write you this mail as a response to a recent article from your newspaper, "The silent fall of healthy old games", which expose the opinion that the raise in popularity of internet and computer games is having a direct negative effect on children’s health, fitness and social skills.
  • Without any doubts, most internet-related activities tend to happen while sitting down, and recently published research has shown just how damaging it is for an organism that for most of its evolutionary history was not to be sitting in the first place.
  • Health and fitness are certainly damaged by Netflix and TV binge-watching, but the same source that offers the tool to damage one self, offers the same tools to learn a correct nutrition, exercices and all the scientific research needed to actually understand the whys.
  • Just like the paper I cited above.
  • I would not say that social skills are damaged, but they are certainly changed.
  • With no study at hand, I must speak for what it seems correct, and this might be wrong, of course.
  • Most youngsters and millenials are on services that require constant interaction with others, way more than what would happen in real life.
  • This constant social interaction must force their social skills to evolve into a different direction than the old one, and we see the appearance of services such as streaming and crowd-founding, for example, that thrive on this new sense of ramified community.
  • Computers and internet are certainly pervasive and dynamic, it’s natural that some have difficulties approaching it and maybe even genuine fears, but it’s only the progress that advances, and if the past has taught us a lesson, is that one should avoid getting in the road of the progress, but jump on board.
  • Yours, Kenneth McCormick

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    • Estimated Prof. Tratt, I write you this mail as a response to a recent article from your newspaper, "The silent fall of healthy old games", which expose the opinion that the raise in popularity of internet and computer games is having a direct negative effect on children’s health, fitness and social skills.
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    • Without any doubts, most internet-related activities tend to happen while sitting down, and recently published research has shown just how damaging it is for an organism that for most of its evolutionary history was not to be sitting in the first place.
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    • Health and fitness are certainly damaged by Netflix and TV binge-watching, but the same source that offers the tool to damage one self, offers the same tools to learn a correct nutrition, exercices and all the scientific research needed to actually understand the whys.
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    • This constant social interaction must force their social skills to evolve into a different direction than the old one, and we see the appearance of services such as streaming and crowd-founding, for example, that thrive on this new sense of ramified community.
      Stem nou!
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    • Computers and internet are certainly pervasive and dynamic, it’s natural that some have difficulties approaching it and maybe even genuine fears, but it’s only the progress that advances, and if the past has taught us a lesson, is that one should avoid getting in the road of the progress, but jump on board.
      Stem nou!
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