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There and back again
Once upon a time a young man went to a confectionary store with the good intention of buying some tasty products of there.
So as normally as anyone else would do, he gently went in and searched windows for his desired kind and of course he did find it.
Then, looking around the shop he realized that all sellers were girls and none of them paid any attention to him.
So our young fellow asked some of them to help him with his order, which was in vain.
Yes, no one answered and all of them simply passed by and even didn’t bother to look at him.
So, after fifteen minutes of desperate effort, he left the shop.
Not to be mentioned this shop was the most famous one in his city and he was the first customer of the day.
^__^ What our young fellow learned that day was, not all girls are worthy of respect and honor.

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- There and back again
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- Once upon a time a young man went to a confectionary store with the good intention of buying some tasty products of there.
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Sentence 2
- So as normally as anyone else would do, he gently went in and searched windows for his desired kind and of course he did find it.
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Sentence 3
- Then, looking around the shop he realized that all sellers were girls and none of them paid any attention to him.
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Sentence 4
- So our young fellow asked some of them to help him with his order, which was in vain.
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Sentence 5
- Yes, no one answered and all of them simply passed by and even didn’t bother to look at him.
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Sentence 6
- So, after fifteen minutes of desperate effort, he left the shop.
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- Not to be mentioned this shop was the most famous one in his city and he was the first customer of the day.
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Sentence 8
- ^__^ What our young fellow learned that day was, not all girls are worthy of respect and honor.
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