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  • Please help me for correcting the composition blew. mainly find out the wrong using of grammar or somewhere not native，Many thanks in advance.
  • The bar chart shows the changes of sales in 3 different areas(Game software, Cds, DVD or video) in those 4 years(from 2000 to 2003).
  • The volume of sale of CDs kept a highest postion of sales, though this figure indicated a slow drop among those 4 years.
  • In contrust, a significant increase was found in the sale colume of DVD/Vido over the same period(from less than 20 $bn to 31 $bn ).
  • This number for Games software also suffered a moderate rise (19 $bn in 2003, 15 $bn in 2000).
  • CDs owns the strongest purchasing power, which palyed an absolute lead role among media productions and hold about double times than DVD/Video, three times than Games software in 2000.
  • CDs and DVDs, though, still less share than CDs in 2003, but manifested an impressive captitiveness

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    • Please help me for correcting the composition blew. mainly find out the wrong using of grammar or somewhere not native，Many thanks in advance.
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    • The bar chart shows the changes of sales in 3 different areas(Game software, Cds, DVD or video) in those 4 years(from 2000 to 2003).
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    • In contrust, a significant increase was found in the sale colume of DVD/Vido over the same period(from less than 20 $bn to 31 $bn ).
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    • CDs owns the strongest purchasing power, which palyed an absolute lead role among media productions and hold about double times than DVD/Video, three times than Games software in 2000.
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