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  • Children

  • Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.
  • Others, however, believe that school is a place to learn this Discuss both of this views and give you opinion.
  • Children absorb everything from people they meet, good or bad; the language; the behaviour; the principle standard. they observe adult and emulate them.
  • Some scientists believe that parents’ behaviours affect on even infants who are under tow years old, for example: if the mother does not respond to the crying quickly the Child could become aggressive in his childhood and nags too much.
  • For this reason people think that children must be learnt by their parents how to become useful members in the society in any way they can such as learning new languages with flash cards from early age or owning educational toys teach them a particular type of job like the toys which contain all kitchen staff or Doctor tools then the children will think of being chief, doctor and so on.
  • However, some believes that parents have to let them enjoy their childhood, watch TV, play computer game, eating and sleeping away from teaching determine it is the school duties as the teacher has to point out the usage in the society of any information will be given to the students.
  • In my views, most parents know their children abilities.
  • So, they have to focus on their trends and the most important thing is to avoid putting them under pressure to learn their parents preferences not to mention strengthen their talents by encouraging them.

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    • Children absorb everything from people they meet, good or bad; the language; the behaviour; the principle standard. they observe adult and emulate them.
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    • Some scientists believe that parents’ behaviours affect on even infants who are under tow years old, for example: if the mother does not respond to the crying quickly the Child could become aggressive in his childhood and nags too much.
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    • For this reason people think that children must be learnt by their parents how to become useful members in the society in any way they can such as learning new languages with flash cards from early age or owning educational toys teach them a particular type of job like the toys which contain all kitchen staff or Doctor tools then the children will think of being chief, doctor and so on.
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    • However, some believes that parents have to let them enjoy their childhood, watch TV, play computer game, eating and sleeping away from teaching determine it is the school duties as the teacher has to point out the usage in the society of any information will be given to the students.
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    • So, they have to focus on their trends and the most important thing is to avoid putting them under pressure to learn their parents preferences not to mention strengthen their talents by encouraging them.
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