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  • The problem of average weight of people

  • Nowadays obesity became a big cause of concern in different countries especially in the US, Mexico and Australia.
  • Overweight people suffer from different diseases and problems in private lives.
  • There is a common opinion that the causes of obesity are junk food and lack of physical exercises.
  • The spreading of fast food plays an important role in human`s health.
  • The fast food contains a lot of chemical ingredients such as Trans fats, MSG and gene modified components.
  • These substances cause various heart diseases, strokes, diabetes.
  • Additionally, in case of long term consumption, these substances may cause both reproductive and hormonal systems.
  • Needless to say, the fast food causes obesity as well.
  • On the other hand, modern life style includes a lot of time in front of computers: people use computers at work and also spend their free time on the Internet decreasing their physical activity.
  • The lack of physical exercises leads to contraction of life expectancy and acceleration of ageing.
  • In conclusion, I agree with the common opinion that the main causes of health deterioration are harmful eating habits and sedentary life style.
  • In order to solve human`s health problems the government of countries should control the prices of fast food: particularly, the fast food prices shouldn`t be more cheaper than the prices of healthy food.
  • Furthermore, the governments should collaborate with gym holders and support them by reduction of taxes.
  • In addition, every person should take care of his own health.
  • The main ways to increase the life expectancy are substitution of junk food for healthy one and physical exercising.

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