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  • Mini Essay: My Opinion About Advertising

  • It is believed that advertising could make people to buy things which their do not need.
  • However, some people think that ads help everyone to know benefits of products which are make our life easier.
  • In my opinion, in ads I know about new products that could make my life more comfortable and pleasure.
  • To illustrate my point, nowadays, exist so many ways to rich the end point consumer for ads, but some of that advertising do not help to sell more products.
  • It could happen because of goods itself, some of them badly design, have a low quality of performance and sometimes hard to find in stores or in online shops.
  • For example, I was trying to buy a new tires for the cold season because my car's tires were out of order.
  • I had seen ads in bill boars by the road of tires that is made by a famous producer.
  • So I searched in some online shops and cannot found anything.
  • In this case ads did not help to sell the product.
  • In conclusion, there are two type of opinions about ads, either it is bad or good.
  • I think that there are so many products and ads just help you to know about them, but you should make your own choice to buy or to ignore them.

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