anglais

  Bonjour,

J'ai un exercice dans lequel je dois rédiger un commentaire de 200 mots en anglais.

Pour vous prouvez ma bonne foi, j'ai fais et chercher l'exercice pendant 2 semaines. Mais le résultat est catastrophique et en plus c'est pour demain, c'est-à-dire le lundi 3 Mars 2010.

Voici ce que j'ai écris: 

During centuries, certain men used the other men to make paintful sports. They used them as we use good. He eradicated them the… de countries, the… lands, the… families without consent. In the day, the slavery is officially abolished. On April 27 th, 1848 the Undersecretary of State Victor Schoelcher signed the decree of abolition of the slavery in…French colonies.

After the abolition of the slavery, we can say that the France can accepted…a compensation to French descendant… of Black slaves.

First, the slaves are traited as a animals. Is a period, …very warnig and very terrifed. The Black slave… are humiliated. For exemple in America the Black slave…   …use… as a dog… . The woman used to… viol… for the whrite men.

Secondly, being black is very signifacated because   the Black slave… posseded a… identiting. All Black…   …mobiling for the work. He remplaced the animal… and don’t have a… money. Don’t paye. He doesn’t live house…and the whrite men don’t occupied the food of him.

For concluyed, the descendant… of Black slave… deserve the compensation, a grand compensation, but their memories say traumatised all lives. The money no is a compensation, but a day consacreted of the slaves and a reconized by all people.

ce qui est en rouge est faux et les pointillés signifie qu'il manque des mots, ou autre. Il y a vraiment de tout, fautes de grammaire, de conjugaison, de vocabulaire, de syntaxe.....

Merci encore....