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  • international news study children.

  • Some people think that secondary school children should study international news while others think that it is waste of valuable school time.
  • Discuss both views and give your own opinion..
  • The question of whether teaching international news at schools is useful or not has been widely discussed in recent years.
  • Some people believe that studying international affairs can help students in their future career while others claim that it is pointless.
  • Personally, I think that this question is a controversial one and is open for debate.
  • The first thing that should be noted is that studying international news widens students’ knowledge about other people’s lives oversees.
  • For instance, some news introduces us international traditions, cultures, disasters, political and economic situations.
  • Furthermore, it inspires students to study foreign languages and understand other cultures.
  • As a result it gives students a conception of the countries which they may visit in the future.
  • In addition studying international affairs and news would create a general base of interpreting constitutions of different countries and contradictions between them.
  • This information may help students climb the corporate ladder to the top.
  • On the other hand, overloaded curriculum may affect students physically and psychologically.
  • Hence, in favour of students` health, no excess subjects should be added into curriculum especially unessential ones.
  • Moreover, some news are inappropriate for teenagers and should be censored before reading or watching.
  • Teachers should make sure that these news will not abuse adolescents.
  • I believe that children who want to be aware of international news should watch them at home under parental supervision.
  • In any case it will be better for secondary school students to study general subjects at school and enjoy their childhood with no pressure of anxious news.

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    • Some people think that secondary school children should study international news while others think that it is waste of valuable school time.
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    • The question of whether teaching international news at schools is useful or not has been widely discussed in recent years.
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    • Some people believe that studying international affairs can help students in their future career while others claim that it is pointless.
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    • The first thing that should be noted is that studying international news widens students’ knowledge about other people’s lives oversees.
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    • For instance, some news introduces us international traditions, cultures, disasters, political and economic situations.
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    • In addition studying international affairs and news would create a general base of interpreting constitutions of different countries and contradictions between them.
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    • Hence, in favour of students` health, no excess subjects should be added into curriculum especially unessential ones.
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    • I believe that children who want to be aware of international news should watch them at home under parental supervision.
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    • In any case it will be better for secondary school students to study general subjects at school and enjoy their childhood with no pressure of anxious news.
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