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  • Career Development Vs Friends and Family

  • It is believed that spending time on developing one’s career is very important for some people.
  • However, others think that spending time with relatives and mates is more important.
  • This essay is going to discuss both points of views and point out some advantages for a person in spending time with people who are important to them.
  • In the modern world career development has become one of the elements of a successful person, so this kind of person spends less time with his or her friends or relatives than does his or her job.
  • For this types of people goals completion are more important rather that are going out with someone who their well know.
  • They have plans and diseases which make them feel alive.
  • However, sometimes, at the end their life, they become lonely and some of them die very quickly after retirement.
  • On the other hand, there are people who appreciate their relationships with relatives and friends.
  • For them working in an office is tougher than eating out with a mate.
  • For this kind of people work is not as important as walking in the park with their family.
  • They like to call a friend and speak for hours.
  • When they are together with a valuable person, they feel alive.
  • Therefore, at the end of their career they are living happily and have a meaningful life for a long time after retirement.
  • In conclusion, there are people who have different goals in their life, so some people prefer investing the time in career development to investing time in relationships.
  • However, in my opinion, spending time with a meaningful person is the most important thing for each human being.

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