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  • life style

  • It is undeniable that the life style has changed enormously during last few decades due to the huge impact of modern technology and economic development.
  • Some people believe that modern life is much better than in past.
  • As evidence of this, they point to improvements in healthcare and education and the general increase in the standard of living .
  • Furthermore,they argue that machines have changed working conditions and reduced the need for hard physical labour , and they talk about the large leisure industries that have transformed people ,s free time.
  • On the other hand , it can also argued that some changes have had a negative impact on our life .
  • For example, there has a negative impact on both the natural an human environments .
  • In addition,stress from all the pressure in today 's schools and work place may have reduced the quality of life in social terms.
  • Having access to more things and more entertainment cannot compensate for the loss of social relationship.One reason for this loss is that families spend less time together and , as a result ,crime rates an divorce rates have increased and people have lost any sense of community.
  • In conclusion, i think there is evidence to suggest that some of the changes we have experienced in the modern world have affected our lives in a negative way, especially in terms of the family and the environment.But overall, it is clear that most of these changes have been good foe the majority of people.
  • Nevertheless,I feel we need to ensure that these positive changes can be sustained and shared more in the future.

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    • It is undeniable that the life style has changed enormously during last few decades due to the huge impact of modern technology and economic development.
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    • As evidence of this, they point to improvements in healthcare and education and the general increase in the standard of living .
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    • Furthermore,they argue that machines have changed working conditions and reduced the need for hard physical labour , and they talk about the large leisure industries that have transformed people ,s free time.
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    • In addition,stress from all the pressure in today 's schools and work place may have reduced the quality of life in social terms.
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    • Having access to more things and more entertainment cannot compensate for the loss of social relationship.One reason for this loss is that families spend less time together and , as a result ,crime rates an divorce rates have increased and people have lost any sense of community.
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    • In conclusion, i think there is evidence to suggest that some of the changes we have experienced in the modern world have affected our lives in a negative way, especially in terms of the family and the environment.But overall, it is clear that most of these changes have been good foe the majority of people.
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