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  • In today's world, teenagers hardly read anything bacause they spend too much time watching films or videos on computers.
  • This problem is mainly caused by the earliest accessibility children have on technology.
  • On the one hand, it is often said technology is a perfect tool for teenagers' education since increaces the opportunities for a better understanding of new knowledge.
  • Furthermore, on internet they can find lots of books based on their interests wich can motivate them to read.
  • On the other hand technology is seen as a distraction for teenagers because they do not leave an important period of time for educational issues such as read.
  • In my opinion technology is important and useful for teenagers interested in the literature area.
  • However, the use of this tool must be balanced between teenagers interests and reading.

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    • In today's world, teenagers hardly read anything bacause they spend too much time watching films or videos on computers.
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    • On the one hand, it is often said technology is a perfect tool for teenagers' education since increaces the opportunities for a better understanding of new knowledge.
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    • On the other hand technology is seen as a distraction for teenagers because they do not leave an important period of time for educational issues such as read.
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