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  • Short narrative essay

  • The hero moment A big yard with a lot of toys plus aria of sand to build homes and castels that what catch the children to stay in.
  • The same place where my hero memont happend.
  • I was 10 years old.
  • Some people were calling me " the smart girl", but my friends were calling me " the stupid girl" until the last day of the horrbile name came at our yard about 9 p.m.
  • My friend and I went to the yard with an exicted faces.
  • The weather was cloudy " Oh.
  • It seems raining" we did not care about the weather, all what we cared about was to stay in the yard playing for along time.
  • My friends Ali was running away suddenly, he disapeared.
  • We did not notice until we decided to back homes.
  • We were screaming "Ali, Ali, Ali" but no answer.
  • While we were serching, I found a big hole and heard sound of crying, that was Ali.
  • I shouted to my friends come but no one hear me because the sound of thunder was so loudly.
  • There was no time to waste.
  • I was thinking and thinking how can i help my friend.
  • Then I found big and old toys looked like a car I took it and give Ali to climb above.
  • After that, I could catch his hand and submitted him to top.
  • We ran to home by wet clothes.
  • They all knew I saved his life.
  • That was a proud moment.
  • I felt some energy and comfortable to save someone's life.
  • I did not from were the power came to me but I believe it was from God.
  • The bad name changed to " the hero girl" Every one of my school became ask me about my hero moment.
  • I will help peple as much as posspile to save alot of lives.
  • My frist rule is "it dose not matter who you are but what you do in your life"

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