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  • Progress

  • Today I'm going to talk about the idea of progress.
  • Progress can be defined as a movment towards a goal or a higher state, or development activities.
  • It can be found in lots of fields, like in the economy, the social field, or in science.
  • But progress can sometimes be seen as dangerous.
  • How does progress in our society transform people's lives ?
  • First, I'm going to talk about the advantages of progress in our society.
  • Then I'll talk about the disadvantages and the dangers of this progress.
  • In class, we've studied about Couch Surfing.
  • It's a site that provides a great improvment to travel easily and meet people from all around the world.
  • It has become a very useful site with today's globalization.
  • Social networks show the improvment of the Internet too.
  • You can create personal blogs, share photos and videos, meet new people...
  • In the topic of transport, progress is great for the tourism industry and travelling.
  • It is also of a great help for environment, such as ecotransport and special districts.
  • The phone, too, has become the most useful technology nowadays.
  • It is said to provide a better life, it's practical, allows you to tchat, use apps which are supposed to make your life easier.
  • We've also studied about virtual school, which provides lessons ajusted to your own mind, at home.
  • It is great to make the best out of a child.
  • Moreover, progress is useful in the fields of medicine, art...
  • But progress can also have a bunch of drawbacks and limits.
  • Taking again the example of social networks, you can become addicted to them and lose the sense of reality.
  • Facebook can be especially dangerous.
  • People judge you constantly and it can influe a lot on your self-esteem.
  • Some fotos might be a problem when searching for a job.
  • In the same way, you can become addicted to your phone and being unable to live correctly without it.
  • You are also less focused on reality, and drawn in a virtual world.
  • Phone are very expensive too, and some people have the tendency to buy expensive phones while they have trouble paying their debts.
  • Finally, virtual schools sometimes cut the relations between children so they don't have any interaction with people of their own age.
  • So in conclusion, I'd say that progress can be a great source of improvment in a society, regarding education, travel, and the confort of life.
  • But we have to be careful about it, because it can draws us in a fictional world, makes us lose social relations, and become addicted to new tecnologies.

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