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  • Nowadays people are getting more and more concerned about the impact of the internet on social communication.
  • Some people think that virtuale communication result in losing real-life social skills.
  • I absolutlydisagree with this statement because in my opinion , the internet is not a reason of losing social skills in real life.
  • First of all, person can combine real and virtual life.
  • The foeremost target of internet has always been the communication, and internet has excelled beyond the expectations.
  • Besides, with the help of such services, it has become very eacy to establish a kind of global friendship where you can share your thoughts, explore other cultures.
  • Nevertheless,there are people who consider the internet a real danger for society because teenagers spend to much time online and often avoid face-to-face communication. some of them tend to stay indoors rather than to go for a stroll with their friends.
  • As for me, I suppose that the internet is no more addictive than TV or plaing computer games.More than that, it actually helps us to do our work quicker and better .
  • However , I cosider that people should not be addicted to the internet but know there to stop.
  • Taking into consideration all mentond adove ,I consider that the internet promotes relationships among social groups.All the same ,people should try to maintain a balanse between their real and virtual life.

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    • I absolutlydisagree with this statement because in my opinion , the internet is not a reason of losing social skills in real life.
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    • The foeremost target of internet has always been the communication, and internet has excelled beyond the expectations.
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    • Besides, with the help of such services, it has become very eacy to establish a kind of global friendship where you can share your thoughts, explore other cultures.
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    • Nevertheless,there are people who consider the internet a real danger for society because teenagers spend to much time online and often avoid face-to-face communication. some of them tend to stay indoors rather than to go for a stroll with their friends.
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    • As for me, I suppose that the internet is no more addictive than TV or plaing computer games.More than that, it actually helps us to do our work quicker and better .
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    • Taking into consideration all mentond adove ,I consider that the internet promotes relationships among social groups.All the same ,people should try to maintain a balanse between their real and virtual life.
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