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karamy'den mesaj - English

  • The power of guns

  • Actually, we can observe many different kind of power in our world like the power of music, money, press or gun.
  • Actually, we can mostly see the last in the United States, because in the 2nd amendment, the law authorise the gun license, that’s meaning than American’s people can have a gun for their self-protection.
  • By this fact, we can ask us if the USA have to regulate its gun license.
  • Firstly, we will see why the majority of American’s people are attached of their guns studying the history of this country; then, we will study how American’s people can obtain guns; next, we will examine problems that can happen with guns in the USA; and finally, we will see the different kind of people about guns in the USA.
  • First of all, we will see why the majority of American’s people are attached of their guns studying the history of this country.
  • But firstly, as I said the law authorise the gun license in the 2nd amendment who is in the constitution, so just with that we can realize a part of the reason why guns are important for American’s people.
  • Then, we watched the movie Bowling for Columbine by Michael Moore and in this, there was a part dedicated of the USA’s history.
  • Often, Moore filmmaking have some ironical parts like in the section of USA’s history.
  • He retrace the coming of pilgrims in the new world until today passing by segregation and explain that the fear is another reason why American’s people want to keep their guns.
  • Now, we will study how American’s people can obtain guns.
  • It’s something enough easy to get.
  • Effectively, we studied a caricature call Joe’s guns who criticizes the facility to obtain guns.
  • On the comic, we can see a man who want to buy a gun and he have to answer some questions like: “permanent resident of the United States?”, “ever convicted of a felony?” or “any mental illness?”, then he answer for the last “no more, they say I'm all recover”.
  • Then, the dealer give to the man a gun, afterward a simply signature, whereas this checklist is don’t verify.
  • So, this document show an important problem of how American’s people can obtain guns.
  • Even if this draw simplifies reality, we can observe a popularization and vulgarization of this kind of weapon.
  • After all, we will examine one of the problems that can happen with guns in the USA.
  • A document like Of life and death, show a comparison between different country about the number of dead people by guns.
  • It’s maybe without surprise, that we see the USA in the first position with more than 9 000 deaths in one year.
  • Afterward, when we look at the other country, their number are really smaller than the number of the USA.
  • For example, the second position in this ranking is attribute to the Canada with 200 deaths.
  • So, as we saw, this facility to obtain guns in the USA is probably related to the number of deaths.
  • That is maybe, the main trouble with the gun in the USA.
  • However, we will see the both sides of people about guns in the USA and examine their point of view.
  • For the pro-guns, their main arguments are that guns don’t kill people, but people kill people; if we make guns illegal, criminals will get them but ordinary people won’t or thousands of people are killed by cars each years, but we don’t ban guns.
  • So, the other side, meaning the antigun disagree with all this reasons.
  • For them, statistics show that we are more likely to be shot by a member of our family in an accident if we have a gun at home and having guns means more deaths.
  • To conclude, we can say that the USA have to regulate its gun license, because even if guns are includes in the history of the USA, we can observe a popularization and vulgarization of guns what doing many death, what divides the American population in two different sides: the pro and antigun.

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    • Actually, we can mostly see the last in the United States, because in the 2nd amendment, the law authorise the gun license, that’s meaning than American’s people can have a gun for their self-protection.
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    • Firstly, we will see why the majority of American’s people are attached of their guns studying the history of this country; then, we will study how American’s people can obtain guns; next, we will examine problems that can happen with guns in the USA; and finally, we will see the different kind of people about guns in the USA.
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    • But firstly, as I said the law authorise the gun license in the 2nd amendment who is in the constitution, so just with that we can realize a part of the reason why guns are important for American’s people.
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    • He retrace the coming of pilgrims in the new world until today passing by segregation and explain that the fear is another reason why American’s people want to keep their guns.
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    • On the comic, we can see a man who want to buy a gun and he have to answer some questions like: “permanent resident of the United States?”, “ever convicted of a felony?” or “any mental illness?”, then he answer for the last “no more, they say I'm all recover”.
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    • For the pro-guns, their main arguments are that guns don’t kill people, but people kill people; if we make guns illegal, criminals will get them but ordinary people won’t or thousands of people are killed by cars each years, but we don’t ban guns.
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    • For them, statistics show that we are more likely to be shot by a member of our family in an accident if we have a gun at home and having guns means more deaths.
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    • To conclude, we can say that the USA have to regulate its gun license, because even if guns are includes in the history of the USA, we can observe a popularization and vulgarization of guns what doing many death, what divides the American population in two different sides: the pro and antigun.
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