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  • If you can add something to my topic it would be very good)

  • After school I went to university at the Faculty of Architecture of Design and studied only the first course. then I went to another country to work due to lack of money and to help my family. then I dropped out of university, but I was abroad working as a bartender at the restaurant. but one day I realized that education is necessary to get to realize my dream, the dream of childhood to become an desighner or a travel agent.
  • I can draw and to invent different designs, patterns, I think I have a talent because I drew everything that I saw when I was little, and even made my own personal logo).
  • I chose your university to carry out my dream and do not lose my talent).
  • Why I decided to study in your university?
  • Because your university is one of the goodest university in the world, because Korea is one of world's developing countries.
  • By the way I have learning Korean for one month and I think Korean is easy to learn, I like it.)

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    • After school I went to university at the Faculty of Architecture of Design and studied only the first course. then I went to another country to work due to lack of money and to help my family. then I dropped out of university, but I was abroad working as a bartender at the restaurant. but one day I realized that education is necessary to get to realize my dream, the dream of childhood to become an desighner or a travel agent.
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    • I can draw and to invent different designs, patterns, I think I have a talent because I drew everything that I saw when I was little, and even made my own personal logo).
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    • Because your university is one of the goodest university in the world, because Korea is one of world's developing countries.
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