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  • After finishing school I went to the University at the Faculty of Architecture and Design and studied only the first course.
  • Then I went to another country to work due to lack of money and to help my family.
  • Then I dropped out of University, but I was still abroad, working as a bartender at a restaurant.
  • But one day I realized that education is necessary to achieve my childhood dream: the dream to become a designer or a travel agent.
  • I think I can drow and also invent different designs and patterns.
  • Because I drew almost everything that I saw and created unusual ornaments when I was little, and even made my own personal logo).At school I drew pictures for the holidays, where there was a contest for the best work, and I often won .
  • I want to be the best designer.I chose your University to achieve my dream and to not lose my talent).Because I have heard that the Gachon University is one among the best Universities in the world.
  • And also because Korea is one of the world's fastest developing countries.
  • I like Korean culture and I saw some Korean historical films.
  • By the way I have been learning Korean for the last one month and I think Korean is easy to learn, I like it.) 감사합니다

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    • After finishing school I went to the University at the Faculty of Architecture and Design and studied only the first course.
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    • But one day I realized that education is necessary to achieve my childhood dream: the dream to become a designer or a travel agent.
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    • Because I drew almost everything that I saw and created unusual ornaments when I was little, and even made my own personal logo).At school I drew pictures for the holidays, where there was a contest for the best work, and I often won .
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    • I want to be the best designer.I chose your University to achieve my dream and to not lose my talent).Because I have heard that the Gachon University is one among the best Universities in the world.
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    • By the way I have been learning Korean for the last one month and I think Korean is easy to learn, I like it.) 감사합니다
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