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  • “Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating dise

  • Owing to the problems of prevention or cure, researching and treating are too expensive, and i completely agree to invest in preventative measures.
  • Firstly, prevention means healthy and balances life and this, in my opinion, is the key for longevity.
  • A long-term based cure is the way to live well and without any healthy problems.
  • Secondly, even in our days there are illnesses which can not be cured and that can cause a premature death.
  • We have to prevent them promoting this slogan and changing the way who people thinks.
  • Probably, this is not the easiest way, because changing people mind it is a long and insidious path which states and politicians have to face it as soon as possible.
  • Furthermore, I am pretty sure that with the right attitude the things can be changed in better.
  • For instance, the Big Problem of Junk Food.
  • Junk food causes every year plenty of dead, but we are still promoting it in all the possible ways.
  • People love it and companies care just about profit.
  • In the other hand, of course there are sicknesses which can not be prevent, but we are talking about a minor part of the whole illnesses.
  • About that it is essential to go on in the research fields and trying to solve problems which couldn’t be solved yet.
  • But we are not talking about the priority topic; we have to focus our forces on what really matter (prevention) and after changes starting to look for new solutions.
  • In conclusion, although researches are essential for our community and our wellness, the most important problem is about prevention.
  • I really think that our society needs a big change and this change must be start from the high; our politicians, our big companies and our state have to change our minds in a positive way.

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  • câu 1
    • Owing to the problems of prevention or cure, researching and treating are too expensive, and i completely agree to invest in preventative measures.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
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  • câu 2
    • Firstly, prevention means healthy and balances life and this, in my opinion, is the key for longevity.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2
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  • câu 4
    • Secondly, even in our days there are illnesses which can not be cured and that can cause a premature death.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4
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    • Probably, this is not the easiest way, because changing people mind it is a long and insidious path which states and politicians have to face it as soon as possible.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6
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  • câu 11
    • In the other hand, of course there are sicknesses which can not be prevent, but we are talking about a minor part of the whole illnesses.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11
  • câu 12
    • About that it is essential to go on in the research fields and trying to solve problems which couldn’t be solved yet.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12
  • câu 13
    • But we are not talking about the priority topic; we have to focus our forces on what really matter (prevention) and after changes starting to look for new solutions.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 13ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 13
  • câu 14
    • In conclusion, although researches are essential for our community and our wellness, the most important problem is about prevention.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14
  • câu 15
    • I really think that our society needs a big change and this change must be start from the high; our politicians, our big companies and our state have to change our minds in a positive way.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15