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  • Effect computers on children - CAE writing practice

  • I´ve just read your article about the negative effects of the internet and video games on children and I would like to add my standpoint to it.
  • It is certainly true that children, at the present time, play less outside and have consequently less physical activities but this phenomenon is partly due to other factors than computers.
  • Indeed, nowadays, parents are more worried about the security of their children and most of them don´t let their offsprings play outside like the previous generations when everybody knew each other in the neighborhood and people were part of a joint community.
  • The other reason why children are often playing with a computer is because parents work a lot and are less available for their children.
  • Besides, the internet can benefit children to improve their knowledge.
  • Some schools and teachers use the internet and teach pupils how to use it to do a research for example.
  • Regarding computer games, some studies have shown that they help to increase reflexes, sense of direction and quickness of mind.
  • Obviously, it depends on the games we are talking about and the amount of hours children can spend on them.
  • In conclusion, to put it in a nutshell, stating that some problems with children´s health or social behavior stem from the internet and computer games is a bit reducing from my viewpoint and I think that computers can be very useful for our children´s lives and development, relatively speaking of course.

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    • I´ve just read your article about the negative effects of the internet and video games on children and I would like to add my standpoint to it.
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    • It is certainly true that children, at the present time, play less outside and have consequently less physical activities but this phenomenon is partly due to other factors than computers.
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    • Indeed, nowadays, parents are more worried about the security of their children and most of them don´t let their offsprings play outside like the previous generations when everybody knew each other in the neighborhood and people were part of a joint community.
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    • The other reason why children are often playing with a computer is because parents work a lot and are less available for their children.
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    • Regarding computer games, some studies have shown that they help to increase reflexes, sense of direction and quickness of mind.
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    • In conclusion, to put it in a nutshell, stating that some problems with children´s health or social behavior stem from the internet and computer games is a bit reducing from my viewpoint and I think that computers can be very useful for our children´s lives and development, relatively speaking of course.
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