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  • Hypersexualization of children (2)

  • The real problem of this beauty contest is mother excess for ours “little princess” in order to be the most beautiful.
  • In fact, they have excess makeup and wigs.
  • They bring high-heel, reals fur coats and has diamonds.
  • The worst is some of them participate of competitive pole dance or use UV machine all the day in order to have good suntan.
  • Furthermore, they bring string for 8 years old which make for this little miss contest.
  • When a litlle girl win the contest, she bring back trophy and large sum of money that only her mother can receive That why, in France, in August, 4th 2015, the Parliament had voted that children aged less than 13 years old can’t participate of beauty contest.
  • Transgressor will have a fine of 30 000 euros and 2 years of imprisonment.
  • This measure had been taken for contribute a struggle of hypersexualization and precocious erotization.
  • In United States, there are lot of beauties contests and there is a reality TV whose name is “Toddlers and Tiaras”.
  • But this contest has worsen because of make up, spray tan and some little girls bring mammary prosthesis For illustrated, we have found Bree story.
  • She is 7 years old and like Britney she has botox injection every three months by his mother, Sharon who is beautician.
  • She wants that her daughter will became a star.
  • That why she bought a product online for fiil Bree lips.
  • Furthermore, she took tatoo lessons in order to realise permanent eyebrow.
  • The reason why Sharon intervene on her daughter is because lot of doctor have refused to intervene on Bree so Sharon take responsibility for Bree will become a celebrity II- Consequences and solutions Pedophilia Concerning consequences of this phenomenon, Again, look at this girl (3).
  • She was 10 in this photo, but her posture and expression indicate that she was at least 16 years old.
  • So, it’s a reality, and we have to be aware of this: hypersexualization cause an increase of pedophilia.
  • Indeed, they look like women, so, they are more attractives for men.
  • The article 222-24 of penal code punished pedophiles (who have sex with a child) of 20 years of imprisonment.
  • Moreover, in France, article 222-25 of penal code says that sexual majority is fifteen years old : this number indicate the moment where a person can to decide to have sexual relations.
  • So, this threshold should exist to be sexy, that is to pose for photo with makeup and anything else.
  • Ravages to children’s development : Hypersexualization of young girls is a curse for children’s candor : it impact their development.
  • Indeed, you are supposed to progress during your life, first you wear pokemon tee shirts, and THEN you wear mini-skirt and high-heel (and it’s not an obligation, if you want to be class…).
  • Opinion: To remedy of this problem, law should intervene and to forbid UV machines for children, epilation and others methods normally reserved for adults.
  • Furthermore, it’s necessary to make industries aware of their responsibility : they have to stop to produce little shoes with high-heel, little string or little dress with plunging neckline.
  • Then, parents are also a role to play : protect their children.
  • That goes without saying but, obviously, not for everyone.
  • So, parents who buy sexy clothes should be punished of a fine, or at least of a warning.
  • So, you had understood : if you ask about our opinion, sparks are going to fly!
  • To conclude, hypersexualization is a curse that affect an entire generation and indirectly futures generations.
  • So, it’s necessary to limit this now!
  • However, a case is always forgotten : little boys are also victims of hypersexualisation.
  • Indeed, some of them starting at 10 years to build themselves (5) : In front of hypersexualization of little girls, they have to respond.
  • Their picture must correspond with girl’s appearance.
  • Sadly, it’s a spiral : impossible to stop her without take drastic steps!
  • Education is a sensitive subject, it’s difficult to legislate about this.
  • Indeed, it’s a liberty for parents, the politic autority can’t intervene in an interne problematic.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • The real problem of this beauty contest is mother excess for ours “little princess” in order to be the most beautiful.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 1ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 1
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    • The worst is some of them participate of competitive pole dance or use UV machine all the day in order to have good suntan.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 4ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 4
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    • When a litlle girl win the contest, she bring back trophy and large sum of money that only her mother can receive That why, in France, in August, 4th 2015, the Parliament had voted that children aged less than 13 years old can’t participate of beauty contest.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 6ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 6
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    • In United States, there are lot of beauties contests and there is a reality TV whose name is “Toddlers and Tiaras”.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 9ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 9
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    • But this contest has worsen because of make up, spray tan and some little girls bring mammary prosthesis For illustrated, we have found Bree story.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 10ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 10
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    • She is 7 years old and like Britney she has botox injection every three months by his mother, Sharon who is beautician.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 11ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 11
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    • The reason why Sharon intervene on her daughter is because lot of doctor have refused to intervene on Bree so Sharon take responsibility for Bree will become a celebrity II- Consequences and solutions Pedophilia Concerning consequences of this phenomenon, Again, look at this girl (3).
      Voĉdoni nun!
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    • Moreover, in France, article 222-25 of penal code says that sexual majority is fifteen years old : this number indicate the moment where a person can to decide to have sexual relations.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 20ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 20
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    • Ravages to children’s development : Hypersexualization of young girls is a curse for children’s candor : it impact their development.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 22ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 22
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    • Indeed, you are supposed to progress during your life, first you wear pokemon tee shirts, and THEN you wear mini-skirt and high-heel (and it’s not an obligation, if you want to be class…).
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 23ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 23
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    • Opinion: To remedy of this problem, law should intervene and to forbid UV machines for children, epilation and others methods normally reserved for adults.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 24ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 24
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    • Furthermore, it’s necessary to make industries aware of their responsibility : they have to stop to produce little shoes with high-heel, little string or little dress with plunging neckline.
      Voĉdoni nun!
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    • Indeed, some of them starting at 10 years to build themselves (5) : In front of hypersexualization of little girls, they have to respond.
      Voĉdoni nun!
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